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    Miss My Dawgs

    Yo homies, wrote this shit fo my bro and my homies who was killed in gang related violence on april 29th 2005 and may 5th 2005... this is fo my brother A-C-E A.K.A Aaron Chris Evans, my homie Paul Marcello A.K.A tha spit masta, and my best friend Sean Smith A.K.A Loc... this chorus is from the song Miss my dawgs by lil' wayne...

    I Miss My Dawgs

    [Intro]
    shiiit niggaz,
    why did i left?
    no way them niggaz woulda popped u if i was wit u...
    you lived by the gun, died by the gun niggaz,
    true blood souljas,
    R.I.P. Spit
    R.I.P. Loc
    Shiit...
    Specail R.I.P. fo' u A-C-E
    miss you brotha

    [Chorus]
    Man I miss my dawgs
    Many nights club poppin
    Many nights we were blowin trees
    Many nights we were hustlin
    Man I miss my dawgs
    Me and you through thick and thin
    Me and you through the very end
    For only you I was in the game


    [Verse 1]

    It was Friday, April 29th, the night that my bro was stolen,
    if we're all God's plan, then did he plan for that gat to be blowin?
    i guess life leads in different directions, we never really knowin,
    and now that you left in a different direction, got me wonderin where am i goin?
    ACE nigga, you always said you had to play wit the cards you were dealt,
    And now unfortunately I'm sittin in my house by myself,
    not used to rappin wit out you here to help,
    and poof your gone, after all this shit we been through,
    and i noe that lil' jarome is gon' miss you,
    you was always there for him, you was the best uncle that exists dude,
    before you died he said he wanted to do things jus like unkie chris do,
    and then u died, right afta that chat wit my man Issue,
    Nigga I’m sure he gon’ miss you too,
    And I promise I’ll be with you soon,
    Nigga,

    [Chorus]

    Man I miss my dawgs
    Many nights club poppin
    Many nights we were blowin trees
    Many nights we were hustlin
    Man I miss my dawgs
    Me and you through thick and thin
    Me and you through the very end
    For only you I was in the game

    [verse 2]

    I grew up in the hood, therefore the hood is all I know
    I grew up wit sum niggaz, then watched them niggaz go,
    I knew that night I shouldn’t of left you guys,
    Three gunshot blasts, suddenly three of my homies died,
    We was never wealthy niggaz, but we was hood rich,
    Spent many long nights, just chillin wit our click
    Now all I got left is A-C-E r.i.p tatted on my wrists,
    It’s the shit,
    Cuz you a nigga that is gonna be missed, as I sit here writin this,
    I gotta resist the temptations of crying, I must persist,
    Live my life to the fullest, and maybe one day in the midst,
    I’d see you my niggaz, see y’all at thugs mansion, see y’all through the fog,
    But that’s not until later, all I can do now is just miss all o my dawgs,

    [chorus]

    Man I miss my dawgs
    Many nights club poppin
    Many nights we were blowin trees
    Many nights we were hustlin
    Man I miss my dawgs
    Me and you through thick and thin
    Me and you through the very end
    For only you I was in the game

    [verse 3]

    I remember all the times we had as a crew,
    Young and clueless, spent hours jus kickin it sniffin some glue,
    Smoking blunts, while we grippin on twos,
    Have to discipline niggaz, for steppin on our shoes,
    Runnin up on their front lawns, guns drew,
    Crank up the NWA, shut off that blink 182,
    From living the glorious life, young prankstas,
    Then we grew to notorious life, cold gangstas,
    And for what, to be buried at the age of 25?
    The chances are against us, there’s no way to survive, livin this hood life,
    I’m gonna miss every day together that we’ve spent,
    Many days hustling, just to make a few cent,
    Even those 3 years we spent in the pen,
    I’d do it all over again, just to be wit u again,
    But you’re gone now, and I gotta accept the reality of your fatality,
    But I don’t know how? With all your vitality,
    nigga you took 5, I thought you had immortality,
    But I guess that I was lead wrong, that’s why I wrote this song,
    So I have a piece of you, now that you’re gone,
    Muthafucka,
    And don’t worry niggaz, I’ll take care of your kids and wifes,
    Cuz you’ve taken care of me all my life nigga,
    We’ve been together fo’ 18 years, livin in this life of war,
    You’ve been wit me through all my tears (gun cocks) and now it’s time to get some more

    RIP Billboard we miss u nigga


    Aaron Chris Evans A.K.A. A-C-E--- July 19 1980- April 29 2005
    Paul Marcello A.K.A. Tha Spit Masta--- June 30 1983- May 5 2005
    Sean Smith A.K.A. Loc--- March 4 1985- May 5 2005

    RIP Billboard we miss u nigga

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    Last edited by Kalos Graphē; May 17th, 2005 at 09:08 PM
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    Pretty good, try to up your vocab alittle thwo in some metas but all in all good drop put good emotion into keep doin your thing.

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    Wow man, I don't care what anyone else says about this. I thought this shit was so good, like really good. Same flow the whole way, nice images, great story. I mean, It felt really deep. This song is sick. Honestly I'm speechless. Nice job man.

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    thanx man i'll take that complement... haha i saw ur shit ur pretty talented urself... uppin
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    Lmmfao At This Getting Good Compliments..If Your Gunna Make Up Names For Your "Dawgs" Dont Name Um After Gran Theft Auto: San Andreas. But Anyways, Not That Good. No Emotion Thats Real Cuz Im Guessing This Is Fake And Your Trying To Get The "E-Thug Gangster Status". Imagery Is Lacking As Well.

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    Man Your Wack If You Made This Up Caz Ive Had Tradities And Its Nothin To Just Rap Fake About Man If Your Shittin Us Thats Jacked Up
    Overall Good Verse If True Yet If Not Man Just Leave

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    nigga, i aint even played san andreas yet! y'all dont think my niggaz is real? well they was homie... nd if u 2 rapped up bout yo self 2 not even giv a shit, well then that's yo probem... cuz my niggaz meant alot to me man... nd if u dont like the piece, that yo own opinion...

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    yo homies im uppin i need sum feedback n shit muthafuckas
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    Sorta lacking in the cypher type raps. But good.not that good. It does sound kind of played out doe. I mean 3 years in the pen. brotha die at 25. gang bangin. N***a's With Attitude playing after ya do drugs. Lil suspicious my man.

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    /\ jus my opinion dope

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    common peeps i need real feedback here... uppin niggaz
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    The structure could be fixed up by editing some. There was some emotion that got across with this. In spots you rhymed more complex words, however most of the rhyming was simple. The emotion was meant to be the main focus however, and I think that with better description, the reader would feel it more. There also could have been some deeper concepts thrown in the piece to bring up the quality.
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    yo thanx fo tha feedback crazycarl ima drop u sum right now... k peeps im uppin common i need sum mo feed
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    Quote Originally Posted by Awh.Chew
    Lmmfao At This Getting Good Compliments..If Your Gunna Make Up Names For Your "Dawgs" Dont Name Um After Gran Theft Auto: San Andreas. But Anyways, Not That Good. No Emotion Thats Real Cuz Im Guessing This Is Fake And Your Trying To Get The "E-Thug Gangster Status". Imagery Is Lacking As Well.
    ^I hope this aint fake because i lost frenz and it aint no fucking joke!

    Anyway i fort this wasn't too bad you could of put mo into it made it deep but it was ok!
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