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    .:Masters of Puppets:. {SS Piece}

    Masters of Puppets





    Blur shadows progress unheard over the binary chessboard,
    Silently, modern Pleidas caress violently the future of our world,
    An absurd curled view cripples the individual,
    ..the compressed&swirled truth turns to quipu riddles...
    ..
    ..
    ..How?
    ..
    ..
    Electromagnetic fields pollute the skies,
    While deceiving puppet strings dilute their lies,
    Evening anesthetic yields hypnotic slavery in their minds,
    ..Disguised gothic drapery before their eyes…
    Blinds towards the plans of mass control
    masses crawl under the shoulders of their controlled hands,
    Brahman classes unfold around unseen borders
    over the world’s cold lands,
    Obscene orders hold down the reign of sheep pastors
    thru oligarchic means,
    ..Elite masters abstain from rules as they maul freedoms
    thru anarchic sins,
    And all this remains just another brick in the wall?
    Fools! Your leaders sustain the genes of greed,
    Economy bleeds as this monarchic pigs rain
    information showers thru the airways,
    Nowadays nations devoured&slain thru hecatombs to the
    mundane gods,
    Chained ants to the system’s foundation lay in wounds
    scoured&drained in pained squads,
    Maintained poison floods sustain the bane in which
    criminal administrations came,
    Subliminal brainwashed minds restrained in
    minimum rights..
    ..Retained in pitiful lifes…jailed in ridiculous lies.
    All for their demise...
    ..
    ..
    Puppet strings at their wrist
    controlled by them control the population,
    I guess for them to exist..
    ..they need character assassination…
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    ^You should be banned for that.

    This was cool. It was a bit vague for me and vocab seemed a little forced. It was still a cool piece. I liked the last piece from you I read, but this was decent. Keep up the good wor.
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    he seriously should be banned for that.

    thx for the feed Wicked.I don't think i left anything vague.if you didn't understand some of my metaphors,tell which ones and i'll explain.

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    damn i really liked this. the wording was stunning. i havent been reading anything lately really cuz ive been so busy. this was very good though. very solid voice. perfect word choice. and i think you were very detailed in this. i didnt think anything was vague. i really liked the opening stanza. very good. keep repping homie.
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    Very creative and unique u had an outstanding vocabulary an outstanding mostly everything in here u painted the picture for me with those words had some stretched out lines but thats good had word structure and basicly this is a good piece really theres nothing i can recommend u to improve on this was perfect so keep up doin pieces like these u can go places with this piece good job here!

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    An absurd curled view cripples the individual,
    ..the compressed&swirled truth turns to quipu riddles...

    i liked this line.

    Electromagnetic fields pollute the skies,
    While deceiving puppet strings dilute their lies,

    opening line is really good.

    Fools! Your leaders sustain the genes of greed,
    Economy bleeds as this monarchic pigs rain
    information showers thru the airways,
    Nowadays nations devoured&slain thru hecatombs to the
    mundane gods,

    yeh liekd this aswell .

    your vocab was really nice flow was nice this was a excellent piece lots of nice lines to quote on stay up -1-

    p.s hit me bak with some feed on my open mic in my sig appreciated

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    thanks for the feed.
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    this was nice, sounds like you really focused on the topic, stay on topic and flowed fluently throughout, structure was a bit distorted though....kinna short stretch out youre bars a bit longer.

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    whoa, pretty nice k9.

    Your new structure is nice, and it helps the flow, and its consistent. Multis were great, and your vocab was great as well......Keep dropping, and showing RB your full capabilities.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ~Untouchable~
    This was aight...flow was whack in some parts...

    Probably gothic. Meant to be lyrics to a rock song...

    6/10

    Need improvement...
    ^STFU you fucking insect!gothic?!LMAO.Rock song?!LMAO!flow was wack?!LMAO!

    LMAO@you...

    Just fucking die dumbass!

    ohh...that feels better.YAAY!



    And Kost thanks for the feed.I really will check one of yours up sometime later.Busy,busy right now.


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    Fuck that...Untouchable...SIGGED
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    uppin this gothic rock song...
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