U Had A Nice Plot On This 1. I Wuz Feelin Ya Word Play And Such! Nice Drop
U Had A Nice Plot On This 1. I Wuz Feelin Ya Word Play And Such! Nice Drop
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Geeze man, you know you dropped a good piece when you have the reader getting emotional over it. That was beautiful. Your flow was never off and always hit perfect. Your use of vocab was very appropriate and helped out your imagery. The emotion was awesome man. The storyline and how you apporached it was amazing. You stayed on track, never lost a beat, and delivered it to the reader flawlessly. This deserves OM of June, easily. Hit the bold link in my sig up please. Thanks.
That line was killer. Whole piece was amazing. I was only gona read the first stanza, but it pulled me in. Very emotional, and the flow was real. The repetition of 'I dont see' and 'I see' really gave this piece a "vibe"Learning the meaning of life is a heavenly design, above
The meaning.. Life, in retrospect, is defined by love
Keep dropin OM's like this.
Pz
this is the first piece ive read by you, i gotta say im impressed.. imagery was iight, normally id lose focus on a long piece like this but it was a good read.. i aint dicc ridin, just statin my opinion.. n e way yea man nice shit..
wun
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Hence Forward
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Her cheerful dress tells that she’s a Souther Baptist.
My tears tell that this is Grandma’s last sunrise..
..& it’s from a casket
very powerfull imagenary
Marry was a tortured child, & noone tried to save her.
Her father hated her because her mother died in labor.
agen so powerful man nice
She just smiled & lived life, enjoying every second.
She didn’t curse God for this. She thanked him for blessings
w00t
overall real nice man real nice...very moving
if you have a grandmother you not this is
how they menna feel...it was nicelly set out
with coo schemes....overall just a very nice
read and the story for this sorta topic had
to keep us reading and you set it out perfictely
so we followed on and the way it ended was sweet
nice peice man hit up train tracks please.
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whoa wicked.
your imagery is amazing......I really liked how you described the grandmothers features, with astounding vocabulary
Marry was a tortured child, & noone tried to save her.
Her father hated her because her mother died in labor.
A very powerful bar of emotion....
Learning the meaning of life is a heavenly design, above
The meaning.. Life, in retrospect, is defined by love
Also a crazy emotional bar....dope.
Overall wicked, this is very, very good.
HOF material indeed.
Please check out my OM, Mother.
Peace
First piece I read on RB and your work is nice and dope. You got emotions in the bars, especially on:
Marry was a tortured child, & noone tried to save her.
Her father hated her because her mother died in labor.
And the flow was smooth. I enjoyed reading this cause you are talking about someone in third person and somehow brought out their emotions. That is nicely done. I am looking forward to seeing more of your OM's.
Peayce, one.
Billy Le
your one of the dopest, illest and best rappers on this site and this was another crazy piece from you. everything was on point
man thts one of the best pieces ive read in awhile man...i usually jus come on this sight to view or post a few free's...an im glad i saw that.there was not one thing wrong wif it,it was all so perfect.
R.I.P 2 your grandmother:cry:
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