Escape

[Johnny 6-feet]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=220360

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=221131

Still working on this, it will be an audio so keep your ears peeled!



Escape

We evacuate the world on a new Apollo mission
Some say it’s madness but we won’t follow tradition
Blasting through the stratosphere, that much is clear
I’m sick this of atmosphere, fuck it, we’re out of here

Time to plan my escape, from this land that getting raped
Shattered by earthquakes, and the human birth rate
Fucked over in a perverse way, I’d sooner replace
The industrial with Eden, not nuclear waste
Uproot the tree of knowledge, tear it limb from limb
Erase the Serpent Devil and Adam’s sin from him
But time travel is impossible, I face the sky
And visualise a solar system, a new place to fly
I sit in this pilot’s seat, I’ve got the compulsion
To break these shackles with a system of rocket propulsion
A file a case for annulment of my humanity
And happily evacuate this worthless tapestry
Write goodbye letters to my family and friends
“I’m sorry, I have to leave, believe I’ll see you again.”
But for now, let’s see the cosmos, spectacular views
Observe the earth from a distance; I’ll be back in a few

We evacuate the world on a new Apollo mission
Some say it’s madness but we won’t follow tradition
Blasting through the stratosphere, that much is clear
I’m sick this of atmosphere, fuck it, we’re out of here

[sILLable]

what can i say other than DOPE..i loved tha imagery and tha wordplay...very intricately written...everything flowed smoothly...i loved it...your rhymes were complex and very descriptive...all in all a very dope piece..maybe we could collab some time...i dropped my SSjr verse earlier today so i dont really have anything to do..any way...very dope..keep droppin tha hottness.~1~

[BIOHASARD]

what can i say other than DOPE..i loved tha imagery and tha wordplay...very intricately written...everything flowed smoothly...i loved it...your rhymes were complex and very descriptive...all in all a very dope piece..maybe we could collab some time...i dropped my SSjr verse earlier today so i dont really have anything to do..any way...very dope..keep droppin tha hottness.~1~
^agree

[southsideloco]

D-O-P-E...the only 4 letters that describe this whole verse and hook. the vocab was dope, the rhyme scheme was dope, the complexity was dope, the structure was..........take a guess....dope. overall the flow was ...dope.....and hope to read more...it's these kinda of versus that inspire me to write more...keep flowin.

Be EaZy

ps- check my OM and tell what you think

[Johnny 6-feet]

An OM nomination? Cool! ^^uppin for more feedback^^

[Drama Queen]

Uproot the tree of knowledge, tear it limb from limb
Erase the Serpent Devil and Adam’s sin from him

^some of my favorite lines

Good piece right here, only negative thing maybe is that I would've loved to see you elaborate on a few issues. Give more details about why you want to leave and go more indepth on certain things you said. Vocab was on point, not too basic and not too complex either. The flow was good, internals worked nicely. The imagery was great, emotion was good but might be upped a little, I've seen better from you in fact.

Overall solid work!

[Judge Judy]

i think this was a solid OM, but as you said it would be a ton better if it was audio (and you stated you are going to make it audio) good job nonetheless, imagery was good, vocab was above average. No tips for this, solid flow as well.

Pz.

[Issue]

This was a good piece Johnny, I especially enjoyed the italic parts as they were very strong and you made me want to read the rest of the piece, which in itself kept me wanting more. Your vocab was above standard again here, some lines were expressed so vastly I think you dwarfed almost the rest of it if you understand lol... Meaning some lines were so great I really felt they made others look weaker even though they wren't, hey, I know what I mean! Your flow and voice will be stronger on audio I imagine, and the beat must be rediculous to get this over, I wanna hear. Overall this was another strong piece my man, keep them coming, Def Poets are owning OM

[NuM-WuN]

DOPE piece right here, your imagery was outstanding and your vocab worked throughout your verse, you flow was smooth with both the verse and the hook, and your emotions were set well with the subject of the matter..fav lines:
"A file a case for annulment of my humanity
And happily evacuate this worthless tapestry"
^loved the flow there

..was lookin forward to a second verse but you stated your workin on it still, can't wait to hear this in audio...dope piece, keep up the dope work n thanks for feedin on my OM..~oNE~

[TeLLaKoNeSiS]

Johnny Johnny Johnny, Once again you have astounded the mind's of rapbattles users this piece was DOPE as fuck The Multies were tight although you didnt use them all the way through the piece, i feel they weren't needed The imagery was dope as fuck and the vocab was spot on, can't wait to hear this in audio then again i'm jumping on the track so i can wait lol my lyrics suck anyway mate a really good drop and cant wait to get it recorded with you.

PaRa

[Johnny 6-feet]

thanks for the positive feedback fella's, the base audio has now been recorded.^^

[themaster]

it was tight
i need some feedback

[K9_THESHIT]

^good luck on that.

Very nice Johhny.I can see this an audio,it will come out dope.Did you finish writting all of it?Anyway,liked the topic and how you wrote around it,you've did a pretty good job on touching some of the issues in our world today.The flow was solid,liked the rhymescheme.Liked the hook also.Donno what else to say,except good job buddy.

[:.Apollo.:]

very nice drop... loved the flow and imagery....

[:.Apollo.:]

very dope drop....