Through The Reflection(my First Open Mic)

[MISTA GRIM]

Every Thing Has A Plan, It's On This Earth For A Reason
From Season To Season, My Mind Is Captured In Treazon
So Why Can't I Reveal The True Meanin To The Text
What Do I Do Next Bible Scriptures Like They Tatooed On My Chest
My Heart Is My Vest, It Helps And Protects And Even Will Project
These Ideas I Posess The Line Of Good And Evil I Caress
I'm Outside Of The Rest My Flowz Mainly The Best My Target Is Sucess
So Hopefully The Lord Will Bless
So As I Sit And Look Through The Reflection, I See
I Little Man Cummin Up That Looks Just Like Me
G-units, Doo-rags And Nike
Sportin' A White Tee Succes Wasn't Wasn't Really Likely
So As I Stare Through The Mirror And See My Lifes Course
I Think Mind And sanity Have Got A Divorce

[sILLable]

pretty decent...good rhyme scheme...good aspects all around...you just need some more complexity in all aspects....and read tha rules before you post....check out tha link in my sig titled Concrete Roses..id appreciate it.~1~

[XXX]

This was okay, your rhyme scheme was good for this type of topic. I would not have expected too much multies. Overall I give it a 7/10 but if you speak of "deep" topics, I prefer longer verses and structure it into a song to show skill.

[MISTA GRIM]

Uppin 4 Feed

[Freaky Zeke]

I agree wit Treazon
To make it better u could of made it longer
That would of maybe helped u elevate more
Like the topic keep droppin hommie

[:.Apollo.:]

nice OM for you first one...
i liked the flow and the vocab was decent...
Seemed to stay together in all parts and flow well

[:.Apollo.:]

stay up and keep elevatin...
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[MISTA GRIM]

Thanx 4 Da Feed Yall

[brady]

well i dont know alot about rap..shit someone mentioned multies up there and i dont even know what they are...but you leftfeed on my open mic so ima leave feed on yours...and basically i cant get all technical like them but i do know i liked it lol...8/10...keep it up

[MISTA GRIM]

Thnx 4 Da Feed Keep Droppin It.

[MISTA GRIM]

Bring Sum More Feed Yo