Never Knowing

[paul magic]

Never Knowing

As I Walk Freely Ive Never Felt So Tall
People In Thrall Franticly falling in sprawl
My Mind Confidint I Cant Lose A Battle thats lost
Unfortuitly For Me Not Knowing The Final Cost
Not A Careles Thought Running Thru My One Track Mind
As I Continue To Bind More CLips To This Gun
It Finally Dawns Upon Me That My Wife Has A Son
I Fall To My Knees As Shot Run Out
I Look Around Me And Realize It My Friends All A Pout
But I Cnt Stop Here This Shit Wont Get Me No Were
So I Grab A Bunch Of Kids And Drag Them Shots A Blazin Upstairs
A Man Knocks On Room 214
Tells Me To Come Down Im Only Making A Scene
Theres People Down There That Care He Says They Wanna Hug Me
Once Again Not Knowing It Will Be Prison That Loves Me
So I Tell Him To Fuck Off And Get Outa My Way
For All Hes Gonna Be Is Anotha Widower Taday
So he Leaves And I Think Im Homefree
But 5 Mins Later Seems Hes Back For Me But It Wasent A Nice Man
See This They Say i Had Till Three Before They Bust In there And Pop A Cap In Me
So I Screem Die And Point My Gun At The Door It Pops Upon And Shots Seem To Fly Galore
Bullets Rip Thru My Friends But None Hit Me And I Realize Was It Worth It For Me
So I Re Grip My Gun And Say Back Away They Dont Lisen So I Say What Rodeny Would Say
"Cant Me All Just Get Along" And I Stand And Back Away
They Screem Get Down But Jail Wont Inprison Me
So I Look Out The Window And They See What I See
A Bullet Flys As They Attempt To Stop Me but I Lean BAck And Let Got Take Me Away



http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=221336
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[~ladie_streetz~]

some of your lines didn't rhyme along with the other one
but you did very good on here with this drop, i liked the whole thing, long a little bit but you did great
very simple in ways but real also
keep it up

[brady]

i liked that ..nice stuff 7.5/10....leave feed on my first open mic "warped thoughts"

[sILLable]

some of your lines didn't rhyme that well with other ones
but this was an average drop, i liked it for the most part,a little long and drawn out butthis was averagea bit simple but it worked for you piese..not too bad..elevate a bit though...and check out my piece titled Corrupt Authority..id appreciate it.~1~
keep it up

[paul magic]

thanks for the feed i was trying to get more into multies then rhyming lines and if yu have under like 200 posts dont give me feed cuz i dont take it from yu

[wallace12]

i found it a little hard to follow as the structure was more story like than a rhyme, however it was the fact that it was strory like that made it interesting. the best line was the one about being a widower. keep doing it

[Willy B]

some of the lines didnt rhyme and you kept that whole one word rhyme scheme the whole way through so you not really lyrical on that point. topic wasnt bad a bit played. overall not the worst i've seen but still not the best...work on multi's next time maybe better vocab wouldnt hurt either but dont sacrifice lyrical skill for content stay up.

[paul magic]

you people make me wonder wallace kill youself for not knowing what a topical is and every fo foin line dosent have to rhyme if you payed anyattention to what nimrod sed one bar is 2 hits in the beat so i can multie to or three times in one line and make it a bar


Confusing not really doosent matter up