Missions 1 & 2

[EyeBite]

Mission 1:
holdin my position on top of a buildin, aimin at the door
i aimed towards the window, hostages on the floor
terrorists ording 10 million in cash to be delivered to the place
the targets were wearin masks, i couldn't see one face
they closed the curtains and they started to get annoyed
just then, a bomb went off the whole buildin destroyed
it collapsed,.. fell on top of 3 armored cars and 15 men
i wish i could rewind time and save them again.......
i spotted the terrorists sneakin out the back door
this was like, marines vs terrorist, what a war
i ran as fast as i could after the bad guys........
one of them turned around with bold eyes........
and saw i was catching up, he was surprised........
he realized he couldnt win this fight, sum slim chance
i took out my maverick and shot at him, blood leaked out
"fuck!" is what came out of his mouth when i shot his arm
the hostages were in a van 2 blocks away, none harmed
this was a good day i got to say, this was a dangerous mission
i killed 3 terrorists with the goverment's permission
and of course, head of marines and his commission

Mission 2:

me and my team get out of the S.W.A.T van
the captain was explaining the team's plan
plan for team 1 is to sneak through the back door
and lay on the floor and do no more
wait till my signal and we all charge up stairs
sum go down into the dark basement
if a marine surrenders they'll get a replacement
i'll never do that in my whole career
i would never do that, not in a million years
my team snuck through the from door, armed
a flashbang grenade was thown, i was alarmed
i wasnt blinded, i turned away, i started to fire
i killed 8 terrorists, now my rank got higher
winning this struggle and livin is my desire
the bad guys came out and killed three marines
then i noticed that the weapon they had was a machine
i got nervous and i started to sweat..........
i wasnt ready to lose my life yet...........
the other team has been silent, now just me and 2 men left
and ones a medic that is quite deaf...............
me and him peeked down below, marines on the ground
i tryed to hear sumthin, not even a sound
all i heard was the quiet foot steps of the men behind me
me and them hid behind a couch, now they couldnt find me
the terrorists came out, tryin to spot us
but we were quicker, they never shot us
we killed all of them now to go down the stairs
the soldier behind me is like , who cares
leave them, we're alive, lets just go
i said no way and snuck down the steps
all of them were dead exept the captain, he was hurt
no terrorists were alive and the captain had a bloody shirt
now to get to the hospital and heal the wounded
i lived that mission and it was one of my last
i wish none of the marines died, i wish i could change the past
i wish the world didn't have to go sooo fast....
this was a serious insedent for me and i wish a could go back
and now i'm here typin this good rap............

(i was not in the marines, obviously)

[EyeBite]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=227359
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=222404

[~ladie_streetz~]

very nice... imaginable.. i imagined it as i read thru this.. you did good..... structure was good also the flow... great job on this, love to see more

[EyeBite]

thanks, uppin for sum more

[Spoken Words]

well when i started to read i was trying to get a visual but go it until the middle of the first mission work on it so people can see what your seeing god shit from what i seen your structure was coo but could of been better but i liked it but how did you get the names 2 missions besides somethen else i couldnt see it that way i had it as a different title but good shit keep i up

[EyeBite]

iight thanks and if you think this is good check out my other drop called emotions, its pretty damn good, i'll up it for you so you can chekc it out, iight uppin

[Ready2Die]

niice good structure and flow i was feelin u on this homie

[Spoken Words]

leave feed on my shit plz http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...75#post3065875

[EyeBite]

thanks for tha feed, uppin for sum more........

[EyeBite]

uppin peeps
.........

[Jay-p]

i like this peace

[EyeBite]

thanks, uppin homiez

[MC STATS]

Very NIce
Really Feelin It
Thx For The Advice On Some Of My shit

[EyeBite]

no prob. jus elevate homie, uppin for sum more feed

[Judge Judy]

i see your elevating man, im impressed by it. I remember your first couple drops, they were horrific, but i actually see some decent stuff here. Aight, heres somethings to work on man. Your rhyme scheme is very simple, try rhyming the word more then once, for instance, Im a rebel, at a level where no body can ever step hold etc. Use multies, other than that it was solid. Keep it up man, your improving vastly =)