Country of ignorance

[2hot2handle]

In the midst of a vision we view a collision
Position the thought and integrity to submission
The acceptance of hate the acceptance of wrong
All night long people cry hopin to stay strong
Right is expressed in multiple views of anxiety
Eclyptic patterns cross hate and love of society
Warfare, destruction, and the consecquences
The vision cant be seen through eye lenses
Different tensions on different sides segregate
The hate relate to dominate when unrest elevates
Issues describe the social order of opposing mindset
The love I met and the hate I ran into makes me upset
Escaped priorities of life I could have done better
Cause social destruction limits and prevents us together
I see you, you ignore me, thats what I call our country
You dont get along and socially inept with no money
As you cry on earths soil and ya kid upset of turmoil
When the substance of love is dead for sale of oil


Tightened tension like braces napalm of these faces
Color skinned people in the world through ages
Displayed poor, dumb, ignorant and what we call violent
This ignorance of callin people ignorant remain silent
Politicians apologize for comments that they "regret"
Troublesome conspiracies hidden under bureacracy
We set the signals that redirect onto journies
Innocent convicted by the juries makes fury
Drips of sweat from workers of minimum wage
The love today is divorced once they engaged
Reality sets in questions religion and churches
We call it nonsense as the politics emerges
Its in front of our eyes as were fooled by disguise
ANSWER: Look at that one kid who cries


Free our spirituality to not cause the conflict
Treat our people as humans and not objects
Turning God into a white conservative is discriminatory
The "good government" is seen as our evil inventory
Held behind droors and closed doors the poverty soars
Pushin grocery carts of cans as rich pour wine glasses
While a mama cryin of her son carried back in ashes
Sombers away as little children are seen bombed away
This country of ours displays one full old dirty ashtray
Slaveships of blacks on highways called evacuees
This media portrays what is falsely and factually
Declaring false statements as evidence of proven answers
Press conferences suppress the hopeless die after
Bantering over the day wastes lives to be convinced
As this country is taken over by white male dominance

[2hot2handle]

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[2hot2handle]

feedback please

[EyeBite]

well, this wasnt surprising that you chose another topic about an america related subject, its kinda gettin borin, but i read this anywayz...rhymes were really good, liked them a lot, topic was a lil borin, cuz this is the 3rd drop i've seen from you with a similar topic, anywayz, vocab was really good to i liked that too, flow and strucutre was smooth and even, liked thta as well, nice job, just choose a different topic next time to get my interest, keep it up !

[2hot2handle]

uppin

[2hot2handle]

damnit dont sleep on this please.

[Baron Mynd]

Well, I havent read these other pieces that kid mentioned, but I liked this. I think its the first ive read from you, and it wasnt bad. You have a flow there thats easy to follow, but at times you over-do the vocab and it takes away from the content in your pieces. You have to be careful with stuff like that, and try to maintain a balance between the two. Have the vocabulary there, but keep the flow. Also, you seem to keep the rhymes fairly simplistic, try throwing in more multis and building up a steady rhyme scheme. Toy with a couple of different ones and find what works best for you. The flows there already, but multis and a rhyme scheme would help you tighten up your pieces no end.

"When the substance of love is dead for sale of oil"

I thought that line was dope, if somewhat controversial and unfounded. See, Iraq doesnt own the oil there. So even by occupying Iraq, America couldnt own the oil. So one more thing idf suggest is that you look beyond whatever the media fuel, and do your own research. Get to the facts, and deliver them. Dont just believe whatever popular concensus tells you to. You have a lot of potential kid, i'll be watching to see you develop ..

Props.

[2hot2handle]

Thanks, but I do look past the media shit. The oil thing is true just that its more popular.

[Domain 9]

That was a good piece. I wasn't really feelin the topic either b/c I hear enough of that on the news, out in the world and in other lyricists raps etc. You delivered it very nicely and it had good flow and good content. Everything was on point and I feel that it came out just like it should.

"Sombers away as little children are seen bombed away"

I don't see that to be true though. We aren't dropping very many bombs now and when we do they are pin pointed in on a specific target. We not showering the ground like in the old days. It's a 1 hit - kill scenario now. There is not very many innocent people dying over there and those terrorists are getting what they deserve. I might not entire agree with your piece because I'm for the war and think that it will all be better than before when this is over. I don't understand why people are saying this war is about oil anyway. Ok we took Saddam out of power, freed the people of Iraq, taken over cities and is now training the citizens of Iraq to defend themselves and also helping them to rebuild their cities. I haven't seen any footage of the marines bum rushing an oil rig, killing all the employees and stealing the barrels. But anyways... Good piece

pz

[2hot2handle]

uppin

[The Vortex]

dope piece yo.. reminds me of my brainwashed piece...

ill flow and tempo.. pretty sick n slick rhyming skills in use...sum nice wordplays...
only things missing is maybe a couple a multies and a chorus/hook
kept on subject well and told the true story how it is in the public eye

dope spitz
stay up

[2hot2handle]

uppin

[Baron Mynd]

You got responses from me and domain 9 telling you this was good, why up for more?! Lol.