Kareless & Cannabarz: Like me.

[B.I.Detained.]

Brixton.
Cannabarz.
06:30am- Bus route 84, to Liverpool St

There's one thing I loathe, aswell as a humid day,
thats a packed bus with windows shut & people in my way.
On the inlay of my brow, sweat drips onto my un-ironed shirt.
& what's worse, is that these tight pants make my crotch hurt.
I am one to observe, eavesdrop, and take in the surroundings,
of my fellow travellers. Which then gets my heart pounding!
With recent events on the news I lose my stoic peace.
I mean, we must expect some reaction to the events in the east.
Now I see diversity in the eyes of this suspicious guy,
with a conservative clench on his lap where his briefcase lies.
My eyes connect to his tightened fists and nervous poise,
the way his torso twitches, succumbing to the faintest of noise.
He's merely just a young asain boy, & I know what its like?!
I'm not just suggesting he's a "muslim terrorist" stereotype.
I won't join the hype, the bandwagon, I couldn't care.
I wouldn't dare, just because I'm white, doesn't mean I'm unfair.
A human suspicion just sitting there, he gets to his feet,
my pupils dialate and through my ears comes my heartbeat.
A glum white sheet cascades over my face, and well. .
I thought an explosion would come as he rung the bell.
The bus stops dead, the man walks off, thats when I see,
he was just a tired, sweaty businesman, going to work. .

like me
like me
like me


06:30am- Bus route 12, to Kings Cross

Another normal working day, again the bus caused delay.
But today was different, the man in front caused the dismay.
He left nothing on display, was this just my mind playing tricks,
was this true, or was this my senses just giving me kicks?
Half past six, yet i was due in work at half past eight.
A paranoid wait brings my thoughts into strong debate.
But this man in front, He looked the opposite of a typical brit,
so was he legit? Was my life being put in this guys hands?
The fear running through my body, sweat poruing from my glands
I don't even feel safe in my own land, this journey could end my life
It'd kill me not to see my children again, Let alone my wife
Its a cold world, and this guy doesn't seem to hold himself.
He has a look about him that is beyond help.
But afterall this guy hasn't dont anything wrong yet,
it's just my suspicions arousing......
But after everything thats happened in this world, thats what you get


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=230647
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...99#post3135799

[Violent.]

Up?

[schizmatic]

Alright alright this was fucking good. Very poetic, got the point across, was deep and real. I felt the first verse had a bit more vocab, and some complex words in there made it flow good, not that the second didnt flow. The second one I was relatin to more because Can was talkin about the dude he was lookin at alot more, and ive been in that situation, and have waited for that person to make a move so I could either run (if he had a gun) or beat his ass (if he had an exacto knife like the morons on 9/11). Both verses were good, couldnt have done better myself, and thats why I dont write topicals, because I'll fucking suck at them.

Goodshit enjoyed reading it.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=228741

[Deviate]

Being English and spending all of my time in and around London this really spoke to me. I think the feelings described here have been felt by many, if not all people who commute or, simply travel on public transport, even occasionally. You both wrote consistantly and with a powerful conviction. The descriptions offered, especially in Kareless' verse, were great. The imagery, the emotion, all of it connected with me well. I felt Kareless wrote a little better than Cannabarz, but both verses were good. There is little for me to criticise... This arrives at a poignent time, September 11th, and in a world were paranoia is becoming increasingly apparent, I think you both captured this well.

Thanks to Kareless for the feed on my OM, Cannabarz if you could leave feed on the link in my sig I'd appreciate it.

[G-Money]

i like the topic... very strong presence by both... first verse... u started off strong and finished strong, thats very important in a verse( to me ) liked the wordplay, imagery and emotion... u were clever with how u put this together, liked that.. good shit... second verse... u too started off and finished strong... ur verse was a few bars shorter than the first but still was nice... very poetic.. liked how u said so much in sixteen bars... emotion and imagery were on point, very nice drop from both ... it was a nice read... please return the favor : http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=231230

[djb]

ight i liked this, but i thought it was a bit lacking in some parts. i really liked how you two put this together. dopeness with the story telling and real emotions. the imagery was outstanding from kareless. i think you two did well for yourselves, but i just was not feeling the second verse. after reading the first it just seemed really predictable and elementary. im sorry for being so blunt, but that is how i felt cannabarz kept the story decently, but the writing was just not up to par with kareless'. overall above above average drop, but nothing too special.

[Violent.]

Ok......

[Trigon]

Alright alright this was good. Very poetic, got the point across, deep shizzle here I felt the first verse more cuzza the extensive vocab and some complex words in the flow phenomonal... Both verses were sik.... 9/10

[Violent.]

Uppity

[Violent.]

Sleepy?

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[Cannabarz-K.O.R]

Up.

[B.I.Detained.]

Upping this number 2.

[Violent.]

meh

[Violent.]

Seriously now.

[STFUFAGGIT]

o shit, dope yo. you both came very consistent, n got to the point. n i felt where u guys were comin from you know..it was very poetic..great imagery..overall a dope piece...