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    Witness'd Her First Hand(Katrina Story)

    Look, I'm not looking for your sympathy, I just had some things to get off my chest and wanted to let ya'll know on how I felt on this situation since I did stay for it and witnessed it first hand... Looking for feedback... Thanx!

    Some say it wasn't as bad as they make it sound...
    Thats funny, guess they weren't the ones around
    She beat us down with every inch of her pounds
    She was the queen of storms undiserving of a crown
    Now, I'm on my own... Left with out my home
    All alone, and FEMA isn't answering their phone
    I try to be known, but they leave me out in the cold
    I mean, yes... I do have a place to stay for now
    But I bow down for these people who took me in
    Family I've never met welcomed with arms open
    I feel like an omen... Not exactly wanted by no one
    I look for the brightness but I'm seeing no sun
    Who won? Surely not I, nor the countless others
    Familys seperated... Moms, sisters, fathers and brothers
    Bodies under covers, a lost little girl with no one to love her
    Where is her mother? These questions can't be answered
    Felt death like cancer... Signs shown like banners
    But they get looked over like there nothing at all
    Is this really man-kinds own fall... Our fault?
    I wish it would hault, but I see no good future
    The only one to blame, we fefuse to acuse her
    Kanye speaks negative towards Bush, our president
    But was it he who demolished our residence?
    He shouldn't have said that shit... Hes not to blame
    Loud mouth reporters show fake feelings for fame
    To me their lame and should be banned off the air
    Fuck them, I was there... I was a witness to everything
    To have my life back again, I would give anything
    Yes, I did pilage and I was a looter who stole
    But to clear my soul, I had to do survive... Stay alive
    I wasn't about to be left their starving waiting to be revived
    And for those who despise, you don't know the half of it
    No clean water, no food, and literally living in shit
    Memories I wish would quit, re-occuring in my head
    Visions of the dead... Despair and blood shed
    I can honestly say my morbid curiosity was finally fed
    And going to bed, each night I pray... What do I say?
    "Let me awake from this nightmare and make it a new day...
    Everything the same... Make it all an illusion of grey!"
    But I know as you all know do... This dream will never come true
    I need to get a clue... I'm looking to who...? Myself...
    With the hand I was dealt, I've lost all of my wealth
    But at least I can be greatful for one thing... I do have my health
    Last edited by Untold.; September 14th, 2005 at 09:57 PM Reason: I forgot something...

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    Bodies under covers, a lost little girl with no one to loveh her
    this line had a missspelled word and if you fix it the structure would look betta than it already is......

    yo, this was a pretty dope drop,man, i liked the rhymes, all good, i liked the topic, it interested me, this was kind of long but worth the read, this had a really smooth flow and nicely layed out strucutre, vocab and complexity was also here,man, you got sum rap skillz man, keep it up

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    I Feel You Dawg.....i Did'nt Witness It First Hand..no What Im Sayin
    But I Kind Of Have Feelins Fot Dis Shit..this Is What Ppl Need To Get Up On..on Da Riizeal..

    Q: I Got Somethin To Add To This From My Point Of View..but Wit The Respect I Got ..im A Ask If Its Cuu That I Pour These Donation Of Thoughts That I Got....holla At Me...1

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    Thanx for the feedback and En-v, I don't get what your saying with that question or whatever, but looking for more feedback... Up'n again!

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    yo datz some hot spit hommey.......nice topic also......some of da lines need so re-wordin but in all dat was good.....

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    !Werd... Thanx... Up'n for more feedback!

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    Smile this what i ment

    my bad i was'n able to respond earlier...but what i was saying was that is it cuu that i pour out some bars of feelings that i got at this moment on your thread...i'll appreciate it...ae!!!!!!

    CAN DA KID SPIT A 16...ABOUT THIS KARINA SHIT..?

    CATCH DA C.O.R DOING THIS :scared:

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