Oh Word Presents: My Misconceptions

[Moral Insight]

As I search For a new way...... to evenly express myself
Disaster creeps upon the helpless and expects my health
To substain fully, All the while my heart is now deceased
My soul stands Substantial but evil will release my Beast
my pet peeves..........Are now more like my death wishes
staring in to Gods Eyes as he grants me my death Kisses
My only Fault was expecting love to come from all Good
...and trying to understand whats impossibly Understood
See i dared to make judgments created by False sources
and then i came to find out the troubles of life's Cources
My misconceptions are my fault.......... My cross to Bare
as I come across empty vessels who's souls aren't There
I ask this simple.................... question Is life Truly Fair?
and if so..............Then why do people dare to not care
If not............ why do life have to be perceived so Grim
and watch my end come near; my tears dry from da wind
yall fail to see the truth because were all just def to Strife
Ur Plain victoms; if in your eyes living is not worth ones life
See my only Misconceptions were created by not or Who
N not by distortion of life but from images Painted by you


...Words Well Written....
Food for your Thought
~1~

[ADR]

......chea!!!!!!!

Vsion was on point only thing i didnt really like was ur structure...the lil" ....." kept throwin me off in the middle of ya lines....vocab was decent u couldve maybe use some more complexed words that would gave ya piece some nice deapth....flow was on point
over all this was a dope OM tho i like ....keep droppin the words well written ...

peace

[Moral Insight]

thanxs uppin

heres the links
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=234933
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=235279

[da king01]

dat was good, but i'm not allowed an opinion according 2 sum people............................................ ... fuck them, dat was dope!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[CiRcA sKaTeR]

Ok Well first of all I can tell your not really like most other people on here, and thats good cause you are unique, and I thought you really did a good job of showing your emotions. Like ADR said, with some of the ....... it kinda messes up the timing in my head but I'm sure with a beat It would come through good. Your choice of big words adds a little extra something, so overall nice spit

[SpitBoxer]

"As I search For a new way...... to evenly express myself
Disaster creeps upon the helpless and expects my health"

started nicely. u fell off to one word ryme schemes after that but still a good read.

stay up

peace

[Moral Insight]

thanxs for da feed
uppin

[.Silence.]

this piece you did was a really good piece I really liked it.You had a good storyline and that was really good.Also you had good Imagry and good emotion in your verse too.Also I really liked the structure you used and I liked your wordplay in your verse too.Overall this was a good piece from you homie keep up the good work

[Moral Insight]

uppin

[Moral Insight]

uppin

[warchild]

Nice piece moral i was really feeling the concept cause it was dark and it was orginal a rare thing these days. You started off with a nice couplet it grabbed my attention straight away the couplet had a nice flow but then you lost the flow for the rest of the verse so next time you write keep your flow more consistent. Apart from the flow it was a good piece the vocab was used perfect for this type of piece you didnt go over the top with it at all.
Your imagery was the most impressive thing in the piece i was seeing what you was saying you painted a good picture with the words.
Apart from the flow try and write another verse next time i think this piece was too short i would of liked to read another verse from you.
Keep Writing Keep Posting

Return the feed on my new OM id appreciate it:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=235527

[Moral Insight]

ok
uppin

[mcl]

this piece was slick like the rhymes bruv

[-Realism-]

....The Structure was unorganized but the Verbal made up the difference, The depth of this was what kept me flowing and reading with it, The mos def/nas type vibe, I can feel, So continue, come aggressive, balanced, and original it will work for you best..Overall,impressive....-JahBless-

[Moral Insight]

uppin