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  1. October 12th, 2005, 02:13 PM #1
    ThaChampIsHere#1
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    Lost Love (deep Shit )

    Ayo this is some shit i wrote for all peeps
    suck in a fucked up relationship




    At First we was in love,and the feeling was Strong,
    1 year later and that feeling is Gone,
    cause we argue and Fight,We can't Get Along,
    so many nights i cried cause you aint come Home.
    I thought i was in love, maybe i was Confused?
    Cause i 'm left feeling emotionally Abused & Used.
    Inside i thouht we Had something Special,
    But you flipt the script like Mr.Hyde and Dr.Jekyl.
    At first you was about Pleasing and Treating Me,
    But now you constantly decieving Me,
    and i can see Threw ya Lies so Easily,
    it's so Sad you not tha Man you Used to Be,
    But I can't take The Lies, I Can't take The Hurt,
    so many times i tried and my pain you not Worth.
    Cause you Continue To Lie and Cheat,
    Fucking around with hoes running the Street.
    So I gotta Go Time to Cut Him Off,
    Cause Tha Love i once Had Now Is LOst



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  2. October 12th, 2005, 03:57 PM #2
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    i wuz feelinthiz shit, it wuz the truth and U spoe yo feelings, i can relate to thiz a whole lot yo. good job, work a litlle bit on that flow okay and it'll be better also your vocab coulda been better but it wuz decent, enjoyed it
  3. October 12th, 2005, 04:01 PM #3
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    for tha respond
    uppin for more....................
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    my audio shit

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  4. October 12th, 2005, 04:11 PM #4
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    yep you're welcome. and checl out my collab with mz. blaze in a minute aight check that out and hope ta C U do more work yo
  5. October 12th, 2005, 04:27 PM #5
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  6. October 12th, 2005, 04:32 PM #6
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    this is pretty cool.. emotional piece with just then right amount coming thru without making over the top...
    i felt it lost rythm a little somewhere after mid- verse and 1 line from the end.. or maybe thats just the structure of it...

    Inside i thouht we Had something Special,
    But you flipt the script like Mr.Hyde and Dr.Jekyl.

    nice of you to throw in something of a meta / punch.. it all runs pretty smoothly

    nice poetics

    stay up
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  7. October 12th, 2005, 05:34 PM #7
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    At first you was about Pleasing and Treating Me,
    But now you constantly decieving Me,
    and i can see Threw ya Lies so Easily,
    it's so Sad you not tha Man you Used to Be,

    ^^ those lines were killa. They so damn true girl-i'm in a situation like this, and i'm readin it thinkin, damn thats me. Your topics so far have been hot, and interesting to me. I know alot of dudes dont really care for these topics, but i'm feelin it. we gonna have to collab sometime though.
  8. October 12th, 2005, 05:51 PM #8
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    yo im not feelin it i couldnt feel ur vocab u wasnt passionate but it was good other than that just try to work on ya vocab and ull b good aight
  9. October 12th, 2005, 06:07 PM #9
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    so next time u could just come back a little harder aight son good try though aight just evalate aight homey
  10. October 12th, 2005, 06:23 PM #10
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    i aint one for emotional pieces but i was feelin the vocab a lil bit but thats it

    needed to elevate
  11. October 12th, 2005, 06:55 PM #11
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    did you honestly think i woudl check your links? you didn't reply to either of those pieces you cheeky bastard!

    Closed, and now you're on the warning list.

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