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    A Soldier's Sorrow

    A Soldiers Sorrow

    I can’t take it and the end cant bear to see it
    my whole life wasted on fighting for myself shits orthopedic
    not one to give up and welcome such failure but to my surprise
    I have face defeat this time and tears of sadness fall heavily from my eyes
    I can’t do it no more, fighting a war I cant win
    To all who looked up to a nigga, shit, I’m sorry again
    It’s been a long Rhode in this life but now all must end
    Because that little flame inside has been blown out from this stormy wind
    Its ova! Shit case closed no more fighting for beliefs
    And its sad cause I’ve had this song in my heart for weeks
    If I let u down I honestly didn’t mean for all ya to follow
    A born leader on his knees, head down, this is a soldiers sorrow
    I’ve been hit from nuclear weapons, to being labeled as menace
    From time to time being used thinking my world will be replenished
    With the goodness of heart, wisdom and shit beyond such treasure
    But don’t get a nigga wrong leading my troops has been a pleasure
    Jus remember I gave it my all to my last breath
    And I hope the next nigga will finish this mission n carry out my rep
    Once told history remembers Kings, not the soldiers of old
    But I’ll tell u if it wasn’t for us Kings would have nothing to uphold
    Grasp by there stern grip and call there own
    A soldier is jus a King that’s mentally unknown
    All I’ve learned I’ll pass to ya and hope for better
    And when the dust from my bones is gone I’ll be able 2 still fly with ya feathers
    I’m exhausted really this has been my life’s journey
    I jus wish I could be that nigga ya really yurn 2 be
    Is it in me shit wearing a crown wit no gold
    And before I take my last breath there are secrets of this nigga ya need 2 know
    In battle believe it or not I was always scared 2 go
    A soldier’s deepest fear!
    ……Dying before accomplishing more
    And for the last time I’m sorry but they win……I lost
    Paid more then the cost to be the boss I take my crown and toss
    I walk on this battle field for the last time staring at the sky
    Jus asking God that one question that was always stuck in the back of my head…….Why!
    Its painful but at the same time I can rest in peace
    Knowing I left it all out here so ya can remember me
    So as a soldier takes his last breath and last step on ground that’s hollow
    I collapse wit all knowing and energy gone jus so ya can see….. A soldiers sorrow

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    You need 2 links to 2 open mics you've left decent feedback on or this will be closed. Read the thread at the top of the forum if you don't know how. If you up this again without leaving links it will be closed.

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    This is a alaryte piece,still, i think you should try make it better so it can flow,
    ,and try to put bigger vocab its still good and keep writing and elevationg peace1!!

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    decent OM your flow was decent ur structure could have been better i like the topic and i like the drop just work on the structure just a tiny bit but good drop
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    i like that shit.it was real good. keep it up.
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    Hay thug guy wat inspierd you to write that
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    Shit im going through right now in my life.

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    Oh thats deep I likes that
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    thankz jo.

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    I'm feelin' that it had good overall flow and vocab wasn't to bad it was a good piece i would love to hear as Audio
    you had me cuaght up in it from beggining to end

    keep spittin'

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    it was a koo song....all i can sya to fix, is put some more vocab up in it.....but this was a nice song...keep the writin up
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