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Thread: Silent Tears

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    Silent Tears

    Silent Tears


    Silent Noises forfill my ear with what i want to hear..
    Wishin this would happen for eighteen long years......
    Just thinkin about this makesmy eyes shed tears......
    I say i wanna die but i take it back, its my biggest fear


    Builds Up Emotions


    Walkin down trabel cove rode, soon it will be dark...
    ignorin every homeless man makin a sudden remark...
    picking up the pace, put on my hood to hide my face
    Lookin all around, homeless people all over the place.....
    Everysingle one of them had a smell and shredded clothes
    the homeless population gets higher and still grows..
    i hate homeless people like when i have to kill crows
    or kidnap bitches and rarely have to fuckin pill hoes
    if sum one takes a pic of me in action i will pose.....
    Cuz i have to have fun cuz this is is my last week alive.
    I'm gonna get killed by this mysterious new guy....


    ..........................Silent Tears...............................

    Emotion Bursts


    Silent tears roll down my frozen red blushed cheek...
    seven days will go by then i will die cuz it had been a week
    I luved this girl and now i will never get that chance to propose
    Only if my emotions could expose and start to oppose....
    I could get angry and kill that guy who is gonna kill me i suppose
    But it would be definately way too risky and too frightening
    Like a dog that is outside alone afraid of the lightening...
    I went to the guy's appartment and knocked on the door
    The guy opened it, i peeked, and spotted blood on the floor
    Tacklin him...we landed in a big red blood puddle..........
    He slipped a gun out, i suddenly knew i was in trouble....
    He pinned me on the ground his figner on the trigga..
    His hand was shaking hesitantly, he yelled "die nigga"!
    Silent tears came donw again i felt a peircing blow to my head
    and after that..it was black for eternaty and i was dead


    Silent Noises forfill my ear with what i want to hear..
    Wishin this would happen for eighteen long years......
    Just thinkin about this makesmy eyes shed tears......
    I say i wanna die but i take it back, its my biggest fear


    ..........................Silent Tears...............................

    Silent tears bursted out, cuz i held them back all ym life
    Sadness fills my soul, knowin that i neva got to have a wife
    thats just the way life turns out for certain people....
    it happened to me even though i prayed in the steeple...




    -SILENT TEARS

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    uppin yo for feed

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    This was a good piece right here.You had a good storyline to go with your topic.And I also like the topic you chose.Also you had good Imagry and good emotion in this piece too.Also you had a good structure and good use of your vocabulary too.When I read this I could get a picture in my head of what was going on in this piece.And also this was real creative too.Keep up the good work.
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    thanks it appreciateed..uppin

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