BRIXTON: Living without a heartbeat.

[B.I.Detained.]

Living without a heartbeat..

this is what it means to me, hence; me venting.
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I see it everyday, in everyway, people who we are born to loathe
& expose infront of the curtain drape, away from the path we chose.
Away from our meager foes, that spark a hate that lives to burn.
Yet people say, living without a heartbeat is just a metaphorical term!
A majority yet to learn, to show concern for the candid things in life
instead of constantly concerning ourselves with the frantic things we like.
Now to mention Genocide,

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a sudden stop for you to visualize and see what I say.
Its ok to look through idealists eyes, to see him lead a country astray.
Robert Gabriel Mugabe; built his marxist views on an anti-colonial struggle
among a huddle of lies became PM and still continued to preach subtle
LIES. A form of repetition we all despise and so on to this date
millions of people ignore a mass murderer rather than demonstrate.
Still. . we all tempt fate, & procrastenate for an easy option,
nothing will stop'em. Making jokes for your work mates bk at the bottom..
of the pile, in denial.. craving for more of this so called "insurance".
Here's my view..
a common occurance- turning a blind eye to demonic assurance?
Raised from infants, evolving into melancholy souls that need to resist
temptation of the scantly. Grasping evil which they appear to assist,
hand to wrist, evangelists coldly going where no man has gone before.
Knocking and influencing at every door, to make fucking damn sure
that they strip the innocence from society, from the monoply & the good.
By the age of 5, our children are more or less seen to be grown up,
because of these people..
these people that you see on the news, week in, week out,
these people that wouldn't know when a peace was in doubt,
these people that wouldn't think twice if a population was killed,
these people in my eyes.. are leaders with an idealists will.
-AND STILL,
a single voice that texts like mine, could never inspire love
because people who live without hearts.. only ever spill blood.

Thanks for reading.
-Brix.


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[The Vortex]

nice format..good vocab...informative, read like a poetic news-script...tite flow...
cud have had some more multies ...stayed on point well.. and delivered your sermon professionaly..had quite a few nice rhymes....was interesting in places
....so yea ill drop
stay up

[B.I.Detained.]

Thanks. Leave links.

[The Vortex]

well u could drop a couple lines of feed on this joint when u got time..

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=255017


New Cross.... ish..ya done know

[B.I.Detained.]

I'll hit it up soon, definately.

[EyeBite]

I liked how you tackled this topic with a prettyy creative style...that made me impressed..ya struucre/lay out of this was tight and ya vocab was cool....flow was smooth and this was a good pecie overall..i was feelin it..keep it up....peace--

[B.I.Detained.]

bOuNce

[B.I.Detained.]

again....

[Percept]

this had a very good style, and i like how you ended each stanza

of the pile, in denial.. craving for more of this so called "insurance".
Here's my view..
a common occurance- turning a blind eye to demonic assurance?

^^that line was really nice, and the ideslist line, good piece birx, and i liked the way you ended it, and also how you tackled the topic.... btw hit up my piece

"The Prophet: Man vs. Machine" links in my signature

[B.I.Detained.]

Lets make this xmas number 1!

[B.I.Detained.]

Up for a ittle longer.

[Mag...]

this was ok...

you're capability to remain relevant during a showcase of multi rhyme arrays is very decent... overall I got a good feeling from this... though it seems to be some lyric poetry not anything I could ever see translating to audio...

problem is a good sounding rap would never have these kind of phrasings... that and the line length is long... almost to the point of stretched...

B+ yo... and that's not bad at all

later

[Dan Dare]

Interesting piece of work. Good use of rhyme scheme, for an open mic; very expressive, and easy to follow. The overall content was quite generic, and indistinct, I would've liked to have read more context to your piece, in particular following on from the lines about President Mugabe and Zimbabwe. This was a good read. Keep at it.

[G Souljha]

this was a good piece good topic, good vocabs, had really good use of multies, and had a good flow goin. keep it up son hopin to see more from you

[B.I.Detained.]

Thanks for the feedback Mag/Jekyll. Not one of my best..
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