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Thread: I Remember Well

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    ... Taktik's Avatar
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    I Remember Well

    I Remember Well

    Numb to the fingertips, reason is, it’s hard to wait…
    In this bitter frozen night, it was November the 28
    Oh the city scape, crystal in shape, your air was thin
    White smoke from your breath…
    A stranger’s blood to your skin…
    Calling the sins – out – loud enough for all to hear them
    You did me wrong…
    On the night that I stopped breathing…
    And although I stood a slant, toothless and coughing blood..
    I remember well…


    Tip toe past the parliament, chip-truck, then I scour
    Through blurred words of my mother:
    Stay far away from this hour
    It’s midnight…alright, now the liquor sets deep
    And I can’t find these damn buses, payphones or my feet
    Wake up the man said, now vomit on my chest
    Sub-30C with wind chill…
    My coat’s still at the club’s check
    Rise to my knees, my wallets gone along with my keys
    And this alley is my enemy slanted 30 degrees

    My skin’s white and cracking, frost bite maybe
    Oh hey lady…
    Help me please, my T and jeans are wet.
    And I’m sure you’ve endured these cold nights, I bet…
    But even you gotta admit that these damn streets are shady.
    She had a face like murder, grace in her ignorance too
    Chin so high in the air, scared she might graze the moon
    Then her Chihuahua gnarled, gripped right close to her feet
    And get this…
    The dog had a fuckin’ better sweater than me!

    Back to the street…
    Now on the main road, neon lights and sleet
    A streetcar rolls near, hey man, can I please ride free?
    NO!
    Get off the bus asshole, I gotta get home
    I said FUCK YOU, and FUCK HIM and your friend with the afro
    Left the bus hostile, clueless on what to do about…
    …my lack of cash for a taxi plus my cell phones is run out
    I scan randomly, now my liquor is fading from me hard..
    Then footsteps from behind, those 4 cats from the streetcar
    WHAT’DYOU SAY BITCH then a right hook to the floor
    Enough booze in me to know…
    …that that should’ve hurt more
    Knew to rise to my feet quick enough to avoid kicks
    But not the full nelson, Fruitopia bottle n’ more licks
    Blood filled noise, shimmy until my ribs break
    And intake…
    Blood in my lungs…right then the scene shakes
    A pedestrian, hopped on this huge dude like equestrian
    Breath again, grabbed a glass shard, swung n’ threatened them
    Then my partner runs, this mans gotta switchblade
    Every which way this bitch sways…cant run so I wait
    For the perfect time, he’ll talk shit and he’ll chuckle
    And I’ll pretend I’m fuckin scared, as I reach for my belt buckle
    It’s of a Ghetto Blaster, most people see it and laugh
    He wont be laughing much when he sees a pound and a half…
    …at his temple…as my savior-my rapier-my only defense
    I rip it from my belt and grip it till it hurts in my hand
    One of the punk’s said “GUN!” they all ran except…
    The knife…
    …as in slow motion he turned to them, n’ then back…
    With eyes wide enough to predict future, he knew the…
    …minute I cocked back it wasn’t a pistol nor luger
    Nor Tec 9 or anything…he swung the switchblade n’ missed
    He’s off balance as I swing in full force and I hit…
    …right on his temple…death’s sickle sweet motion
    His head went soft and weak…as his skull was blown open
    His last breath in my presence…
    His loss of life and its essence…
    A year for excessive force…
    …self-defense itself is but the question
    Put down to house arrest, as my partner confessed the victim…
    …was wielding a knife, wielding a life in a deeper spectrum

    So that’s this mystery…last year and its history
    Little leisure online…so this textcee blissfully…
    …returns to his so-to-speak…title…
    and hopefully…
    will do so and so you see…
    …belong where I’m spose’d to be

    So words to weak, the proclaimed and to the wise
    Not once did I ever sleep…
    …I merely closed my eyes

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    ... Taktik's Avatar
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    uppin...need some feedback, it's been a year, rust accumulates

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    NONCENTZ AKA WORD~PERFECT noncentz's Avatar
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    fuck yes very poetic great use of imagination mind and realism fantacy yet self concious music very reminisent to shabaam shadeeq's arabian nights in the sence of mood and time line spit. over all hot ass rhyme twin stay up.
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    and the tai kwon monks ! Methane's Avatar
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    .. if this is the same taktik, then i always
    knew you had mad skill. been a minute
    since i read anything from you, but this
    comes as a delight to me.

    the imagery is spot on, and you paint
    the picture well - reminds me of london
    or new york or, i guess, a canadian city.
    the surroundings around the narrative
    were described well and you dropped
    some nice home truths:

    "WHAT’DYOU SAY BITCH then a right hook to the floor
    Enough booze in me to know…
    …that that should’ve hurt more"

    you story tell well mayn, n' i kinda remember
    you beating me in a topical battle. so, i can't
    hate on you. keep it man, n' brush that rust
    off, nugget !
    raiders of the lost art ©
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    the pound is stronger than the dollar, HOLLA !

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    alrite man, the ups...good story, bomb imagery, i liked the vocab used, although all of it wasnt as good as it coulda been, your proally capable of better meng, so keep this ish up, lookin forward to your next piece homie
    Yadadamean?

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