This was a good read, and the piece gave off an emotional sense as it was meant to. This had a good grasp of the ideas and thoughts that would go through writers minds and the vocabulary was really on point.
There wasn't any notice of forced rhymes which was good because the structure stayed on topic really well and the wordplay helped accompany this.
I didn't find this too long because of the depth it brought the reader to get to.
I had to read each line by line with an understanding of how they might be feeling, and because the vocab was well written, it made me think about this piece more. You have potential and great talent.
This was poetry at its finest and i'm a lil picky on this, but the lay out was perfect and neat.
Keep droppin, and could ya vote on some of the battles in my sig when you have the time? Thnx fam, appreciate it
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