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    Dear America feat Johnny 6-Feet

    1st - Percept
    2nd - Johnny

    *america walks outside to check the mail*

    Hmm... whats this?


    my dearest love...

    hey heather, its me the kid with leather boots and knitted sweater
    who discretely sits speechless, lookin for ink to write a love letter
    better than the best feeling u create, when u turn to cross my way
    i gaze in amazement that im bestoed in faith, i awake here each day
    im in awe of your conscience, and i admit this being fully honest
    thank god u help others out even when some consider it nonsense
    your thoughtless dedication pales in compare to ya gracious beauty
    as your criticism bleeds thru truely, even within faceless scrutiny
    and sometimes im right when i say your blind with pride deep inside
    it might arise as your final demise, the way u stick ya nose in fights
    take sides and ally with one, get stuck in sumthin u cant get out of
    and for what, im clueless at times on the decisions u conjure from
    but its all love, u know i cant stay mad at u, even when u police me
    disease me, and constantly ignore my known existence individually
    its fine tho cause i know u mean well, hell, your busier than most
    so its understandable that im drawn to u after u drew me so close
    u saved me from a certain life, from grieving over supposed strife
    u showed me the light, opened my eyes to a world outside of mine
    and itd be a lie to deny it, since my freedom allows no censorship
    my explicit thoughts and dreams, now render under no irrelevance
    u see, in my homeland, i was equipped with nothing and knew less
    my prudence there was the reason i turned towards the great u.s.
    and thats the whole point i write my love, because u allow me to
    as thru this love letter, hopefully u see, that heather is america too.


    thank you...

    another one!

    Dear America, as a westerner, i write this letter
    To get feelings off my chest and suggest something better
    I watch you pick on the little kids and take their lunch money
    Watch them mumble their resentment in corners and hunch funny
    Flinching at your mention, passing notes, trying to unite
    But you've got the strength to crush them, dying as they fight
    My advice is smoke some weed, or take bottles of chill pills
    Watch a copy of Kill Bill, be laid back but still ill
    This is England calling, now your sidekick, remember when i type this
    I used to be your bigger brother before the fan hit the shit
    Rest assured i was in your position an age ago
    Life was like a stage show, and my pay was grown
    Through the pain and groans, but now i stay at home
    Reminicsing when my presense was a major zone
    So kick back, relax, in fact have a siesta
    And call up spain so we can throw a fiesta

    sincerely yours, England

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    Nice job guys......

    It was a creative piece you guys had a good idea, the imagery was ok.<*doesnt care about imagery* but it was an easy, and somewhat fun read which made it cool and it was consistently interesting, it fell off at points and got boring, but is better the 90% of OM's posted, good job guys.

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    Wow,i had a good read.This piece was cool,and creativity was nice as well.I was thinking more of a letter directed only to 1 person but i guess i was wrong.The fact that percept was the one who portrayed himself as the person reading and Johnny in a different perspective.Nicxe job on that.Also the vocab was cool,i liked it alot and it kept the flow keeping it steady and smooth.The imagery was good and i felt the emotion as well.Nice job guys.

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    uppinggggggggg

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    tight peice......dat wuz really creative..i liked readin dat...nice use of words..an interesting topic too....good job yall..peace-1

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    thanx

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    uppppppping

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    upping again..

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    Aight, i liked the way the story went and the flow, imagery, use of rhymes were all top notch, this is prolly one of the better Om's i've read in a while, it is quite a shame that it's gettin' slept on and all, but yea this was actually quite a good read, keep it up

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    I have to say the first read was excellent the second was right behind it !!
    the word scheme and everything was pretty on point... much respect guys keep it coming... =D hit me up if u wanna collab on something
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    man this was very good it was like a master peace.Real nice job

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