Assassination

[Swordsman]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=264702

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Assassination

He was a nobleman, a prince of sorts, never was there a bolder man
Nicknamed 'the ancestor', his knowledge sprang from older hands
He studied the laws of his times; saw the people without a voice
Fought for justice and equality, but sometimes doubted his choice
Gave his genius to the poor, taught the masses the basics
And for a time, it was good, creating classes with aces
They were amassing a play list, of the strongest thoughts and words
A new society was dawning when these feelings occurred
The citizens looked up to him, gave respect and tribute
But the tyrants in this world saw a threat and let loose
The power hungry sent assassins to silence the prophet
When his philosophy was how to take the violence and stop it
But such is the way of cowards, waist bowers and cheaters
They hated a liberal leader, who accumulated believers
So they devoured the fever, took a knife as he rested
Slid it through his unconscious body, to render him breathless
Who could've guessed it? ...So the shit now remains
Leaving a corpse of a hero who wanted the system to change
There was a period of mourning, then talk of resistance
And an army began to gather who constructed a shitlist
Those Aristocrats’ would die in the sea of fire
But I’ll save that for part 2 when the deed transpires


Show some love.

[A.O.D]

I'm surprised no one else has replied to this yet, Its the first piece I've read of yours and it most def has me wanting to read part two... I liked the imagery and your rhyming was a steady flow... I could hear the beat in my head lol...nice work

[Swordsman]

^^Uppin^^

[Sleazy]

whoa this was really good swordsman have not seen any of the other stuff you have written but if its anything like this its gonna be really good,
the story line was a bit like macbeth for some reason but it was spot on good,
the rhymes and smartness with in them was good as well as same with the word play. but all and all i really enjoyed it 9/10 for me keep up the good work.

[xfreedomx]

But such is the way of cowards, waist bowers and cheaters
They hated a liberal leader

Yo Im Feeling this drop... Nice Vocab, Flow was Nice and you layed it on pretty thick.......You Made me Feel this piece... from beginning to the end... Keep da talent up....

[Black Hornet]

ok, i thought oyu kept a good solid flow the whole time. you had great vocab and very strong topical relevance. your story was good. overall i'd say this was a dope spit. i think it would sound better to a beat if you were spittin. anyways, nice drop man 9.5/10

[BrickLayer]

i enjoyed this piece had powerful imagery, and good flow... flipped your lines and had a creative writing style matched with a strong vocabulary 8/10

Gave his genius to the poor, taught the masses the basics
And for a time, it was good, creating classes with aces

this was my fav rhyme scheme