I Am What I Am

[Paragon]

I feel like the world is against me
I’m searching for one true smile that is friendly
I figured I could handle one setback at a time
but there's too many at once, life turned on a dime
heart-broken, alone, I think I can handle
just wait for tougher layers to form over the shambles
family gonna split and I think this is it
I’m about to pack up and run away from all this
perhaps go to college and gather new knowledge
but they saw what I had to offer and said they don't want it
I’m starting to see that nobody does
I’m feeling no love and wish it could go back how it was
but I know that it can't and it hurts deep inside
why can't I just for once in my life get a free ride?
no use looking up 'cause the clouds are still black
time only flows forward and never goes back

[chorus 2x]
I am what I am and I can't change the fact
that I can't have the vastness and class of all that
I love what I love and I hate what I hate
I’m gonna change my fate 'cause fate's what I make it

I’m thinking that god may be angry
for what I don't know but it's directed right at me
one thing goes right, two others go wrong
two steps back and one front was true all along
I’m slowly descending into this hellish abyss
fingers curl into fists due to all I have missed
there's nothing I can do to change the way that I live
no matter how much I try and how much I give
no matter the blood that I shed, or the tears, or the sweat
no such love till my death, I fear my fate is dead set
my best bet is not to cry or to plead for a break
but to fight for me life because my life is at stake
all the strife in my life is a plight I must take
cause it follows me everywhere and there's no reason to run
I must try to make something out of a life in the slums
the only way is up because the worst damage is done

[chorus 2x]
I am what I am and I can't change the fact
that I can't have the vastness and class of all that
I love what I love and I hate what I hate
I’m gonna change my fate 'cause fate's what I make it

I have a thirst for revenge and need revenge for the hurt
‘cause I’m bursting with rage for each page that is turned
I’m burned from the fire of desire that's cursed
these things are the worst but it'll be worse when I’m king
'cause I’m first on the scene with the verses I bring
each of the words that I spurt are not meant for the sting
but to relieve some of the pressure from the gestures received
it's not meant to deceive but they think it's best to believe
that if you try your very hardest you will get all your dreams
I pray in the hopes that what they say is correct
if so than I know that I’m grabbing respect
some of the plans that I have as a man of this sect
yes, is to release some of the stress that I have on my chest
but also to show that I can strive for more
in order to get more for me than life had in store
my heart’s about to sweat out through each pore to open these doors

[Chorus 2x]
I am what I am and I can't change the fact
that I can't have the vastness and class of all that
I love what I love and I hate what I hate
I’m gonna change my fate 'cause fate's what I make it


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=263288
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268039

[Paragon]

uppin for feedback

[Devils_Diamond]

yo tight chorus, good first verse as well, your wordplay was decent, and your vocab shined a little more, the flow of this piece was what stood out to me the most, good creativity and concept, i see alot of potential in ya. be sure to post more. stay up

[Paragon]

thanks for the feed. i personally like the last verse the most, but thanks for that. i'll post more open mics, no worries about that

[J.Christ]

'cause I’m first on the scene with the verses I bring
each of the words that I spurt are not meant for the sting
but to relieve some of the pressure from the gestures received
it's not meant to deceive but they think it's best to believe
that if you try your very hardest you will get all your dreams

true .

This was nice, I mean from my point of view . You lucky im on this Tether (House Arrest) wouldnt have even read past the first verse . But keep on goin sonny i was feelin it .
Word play .. nice
Couple punchlines ..
Imagery .. O.k.

[Paragon]

thanks for the feedback, much appreciated. that's my favorite part too...

[Paragon]

uppin

[Paragon]

can someone please provide feeback? i'll return the favor twice.

[Mafioso.]

coulda did better weren't really creative bad way too start N' ur structure N' wording was so-so just elavate N' get creative

[Paragon]

thanks for the feedback... though it seems like peeps be reading just the first verse... you know, it really does warm up from there, lol...

[TheCrunkKing]

decent all round, need a lil more elavation, creativity wouldent hurt either

[TheCrunkKing]

hit up my battle if ya got time man
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268613

[>ALLAH<]

nice verse but it coulb be better tho
need a lil bit more evelation , but keep up
u got skillz

[reincarnation]

I Liked the chorus on this piece also jo, just need more vocabulary and deeper lines making it seem deeper, just elevate homiie and keep writting

[Paragon]

thanks for all the feed, i'll keep it in mind.


crunk king, i'll give you feedback tomorrow, i'm really tired right now... peace all