Space Cowboy

[Johnny 6-feet]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268971

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=268711&page=2



The hook taken from and written to the beat the original 'Space Cowboy'. A Brit Pop classic by Jamiroqaui. What can i say? I felt like doing something different. Enjoy:


Space Cowboy

Everything looks good from this pilot seat
Mind's ablaze like it combusted from the dry and heat
It's fine, i'll speak, preach a sermon for vet's and geeks
About the need to stop the beef like cattle slaughter week
Peeping the stars as they zip by in a purple haze
The angel dust came with us, stay immerged for days
Composing beats that sound inspired by a higher force
I'm lying of course, they were brought up by messiah's of thought
Flying a course across solar systems propelled by rhythm
Which hits 'em with precision, brings fire from hell's kitchen
If i retire they're bitching from the black hole which i left
Dragging garbage towards its gravity, gives some soul to the rest
Stop holding your breath, i stay orbiting and watching the scene
Shaking my head at whorish men who clock for the green
Can't knock off my sheen, or put out my fire that burns
So keep a flaming effergy 'til the messiah returns

This is the return of the space cowboy
Inter-planetary... Good vibe zone
At the speed of cheebah, We’ll go deeper
Maybe I’m gonna have to get high just to get by

Snort star dust and raise the bar, bust with infinite knowledge
Drown in tidal waves of metaphors, the wisdom of droppadge
Leaving comet tails, burned retina's mark my trail
Masses are mentally lifted when i start to sail
Breaking speed limits, pass the sound barrier
With an ear splitting bang you hear from jet harriers
So by the time you hear my words, your brain already knows them
And you get deja vu the first time this tracks chosen

This is the return of the space cowboy
Inter-planetary... Good vibe zone
At the speed of cheebah, We’ll go deeper
Maybe I’m gonna have to get high just to get by

Tilt your hats and lean back in a restful pose
I've got an ounce in large amounts that stress can blow
Tequila from mexico, vodka, extra dro'
And a few red pills for when i flex a show
And whoever's next to flow, remember the legacy
Strive to meet the pedigree, and dismember the heresy
Never just 'let it be', gain monstrous momentum
The minds the dopest invention, and where energies spent from
Give me henessy, red rum, and poetic scripture
Turn the commercial on its head or instead, let it kick ya
Painting a perfect picture, a miracle shines
When created through the medium of spiritual minds
The space cowboy rides the waves of drugs and thoughts
And transfroms a brainstorm to a juggernaught
I'm signing off, on a expedition, fuck a guide
Til next time people, one love, let's ride

This is the return of the space cowboy
Inter-planetary... Good vibe zone
At the speed of cheebah, We’ll go deeper
Maybe I’m gonna have to get high just to get by



Edit, wrote up an extra verse for shits and giggles.

[.Self.]

this was dope b. you gotta put this on audio straight up. the flow was perfect the entire piece. the rhymescheme was complex yet smooth. the chorus fit perfect with this, the structure was set up pretty dope. the imagery and description of shit was pretty dope in this too. again, it would sound dope on audio. keep droppin got my eye on your work b. overall ill give this a 9.5/10.

-Peace

[J.Christ]

It's fine, i'll speak, preach a sermon for vet's and geeks
About the need to stop the beef like cattle slaughter week

That's whaszup, im feelin dat .

Shaking my head at whorish men who clock for the green
Can't knock off my sheen, or put out my fire that burns
So keep a flaming effergy 'til the messiah returns

That clock for green part, you sayin don't like men who fucc bitches fuh money?
if so, your a sqaure.
Explain

Tilt your hats and lean back in a restful pose
I've got an ounce in large amounts that stress can blow
Tequila from mexico, vodka, extra dro'
And a few red pills for when i flex a show

that wordplay was bananas, most defenitely feelin this drop.
Went righ w/ the topic .
I got the image of the shit soon as i started readin, wha i like to see .

[noncentz]

im glad you found a recipe that never runs out of flavor you express your image and wordsinto paintbrushes and the end product is a masterpeace as always im feeling your work........

[A Pimp Named Saucy]

Dope........ and even had a chorus like self said prob be nice on audio.......flow was nicey done also......strcture was on point......imagery of this shit was nice.......and didnt have hard vocab which is good cause dont like alot of hard vocab and shit.....dont need good vocab to make a ill OM/topical and this proves it...I mean i prefer to have Oms/topicals and shit to have vocab but not heavy with it.........tho still complex piece nicely done
dope

[Jawn Raw]

Damn pretty nice....your flow was solid and actutally sounded like you were rappin. thats not something I look for to read what I actually read topicals, i more look to read a poetic style with a flow but not really a rap style you know. but nayway your imagery and storyline was very good and kept me reading. One thing I liked about this was that it wasn't so long and I didn't wanna read a lot so most likely I liked this except for the flow, to rappish for a text thing ya know. tyour storylines are always what keep me reading lol, I always wanna know what happends next.

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[status_unknown]

This was pretty nice man. I`m really feeling the way you mix up your rhyme scheme with the internal/external pattern and shit. This piece had a really good flow and rhythm to it. I believe, You forced a few of your rhymes just to get them to match the pattern though. You could have made this a little bit longer and it would`ve
been more entertaining, just when it started to get good, you ended the piece.. Good work, keep it up. Peace.

[Willy B]

lmmfao word you told me and im thinkin "mmmmm mite be iight".

pretty nice you came nice as norm. packed with multi's as always nice flow........... hmmm structure was good this piece was pretty good not your best but nice

good to see you back and stop lookin so rusty

[topher]

Lol.Nice topic.Very unique.This time to me i think you were more based on the storyline than what you were on multies like i always would see you do.The storyline was good actucally.And the flow was great.You used the storyline as if you were kind of actually rapping it out.The vocab you used was good as well,it made it more complex and added more magery into the story.The feeling here was good as well.I could just imagine going through this,and what kind of adventure it'd be like.Not your best work,but it was a good and fun easy read like always.Nice job on this man.Please check out my open mic:

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=269086

Thanx.