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Thread: Montana Ambitions .

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    J.Christ
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    Montana Ambitions .









    Depression had me learning lessons even in betweens rock's & hard place.
    Fiends don't see me they see a barr'd face.
    Small-time meaning par-say, transaction faster than a nascar race.
    Ask my self, why put my life in a fast pace.
    Governmet trap'd us, urban life from a glass case.
    No telling what i would do for a meal ticket.
    Time to hit a liq, leave em stuck on a pivot.
    period, weed and liquor skipp'n the brain on consequences.
    in & out is how i wanna finish, no witness
    thats my pleasure in business
    Until then, im yawn'n and tired in the spot.
    Put fire on a razor & apply it to the rocks.
    Chizzl'n pebbles 10 and up on a pops
    body like a digital watch, no hands for the cops
    means no cuffs no checkin in my socks
    means my life has luck and now im back on the clock.
    Take myself from dice on the cement to the carpet table
    Casino labels, cuban smoke blowin through my nasals.
    No attention needed, the soldier was born in a stabel.
    woodchips and threaded sheets
    pain so sharp & deep it can pierce through army nickle plated jeeps.
    anxietey attacks in me never think twice on dead'n beef.
    hold my head and stay calm w/ heavy feet.
    adrenaline twisted so how my heart keep a steady beat?
    Maybe Escobar or rich porter
    Over the border my orders never decrease or get shorter.
    Just give me a half pipe, pot pyrex and water.
    soufle got me ending up w/ a duece and a quarter.
    Drug game older than tennessee oilers
    In the middle of dilemas like a rape charge lawyer
    Mother why did i do it, why i wrap that dope.
    why i rap that dope
    Nightmares of see'n me clapp'd at the throat
    I park my roses and rest my body to the back of the boat.
    More of a solider than joseph and noah.
    Over and over whippin white powder w/ baking soda.
    Take me away from the system
    Away from this prison, i don't pump no fruit juices.
    Tell God to take me away from the rubiks.
    Down on both kness, make me lose it.
    I had a chance to skip land but stuck in my ways made me do it.
    how i abuse it, tried to make it through music.
    fear or paparrazzi floccin like gooses
    the nation turned into hypocrits and nusence.
    Dreams of seein me dead on the floor
    5 shots to the chest cavity core
    slow motion i can hear the gravity roar
    face to face w/ a bullet askin what you mad at me for.
    answered back saying just know tragedy scored.
    postponed waken up sweat'n, hearin water dash to the floor.
    Everyday life it's my chore, i gotta get back to the door
    .





    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=256018&page=2
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=265949

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    J.Christ
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    rise

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    J.Christ
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    lookin for feedbacc .

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    J.Christ
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    feedback?

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    Hmmm... i like this... nice flow... nice topic...

    I think that you have alot of talent and your stucture is really good i enjoyed reading it rathr alot.
    The vocabulary was good... nit too extensive which was good as i hate it when people just place bug words in randomly when it doesn't even have any relivance to the peice... but you didn't which i like.

    Well done... and i'd like to see more of your stuff...

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    Most defenitely .

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    J.Christ
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    rise to bump .

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    feed .

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    well, honestly I found this kinda boring in the long run. The text is too long with nothing special to hold on to my attention and the rhymes where way too simple aswell. I'd prefered if you had half the length worked more and each bar.
    the topic was a funny idea tho.

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    hmm . I got that type of feedbacc from you because you didn't like what i said?

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    Quote Originally Posted by J.Christ
    hmm . I got that type of feedbacc from you because you didn't like what i said?
    No thats was my honest opinion regardless of that, even tho I disagree with what you said.

    You may disagree with my comment, we clearly have different opinions on what a good text is.

    Peace.

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    bump .

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    this was aight. it flowed pretty good it had vocab an you did ya thang man

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    most defenitely .

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    coo verse yo.. i like the wordplays and your word choice and usage was coo.. flow went off on a few lines i reckon.. hard to tell if u cant hear it tho fosho..
    some rhymes seemed to continue on a basic level for a few lines.. which can work still i na rap song so w/e..

    More of a solider than joseph and noah.
    Over and over whippin white powder w/ baking soda.
    Take me away from the system
    Away from this prison, i don't pump no fruit juices.
    Tell God to take me away from the rubiks.
    Down on both kness, make me lose it.


    yeah lots of gangster lines n quotes fosho

    safe

    stay1

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