Past,Present,FUTURE..

[Eccentric.]

This Is My 1st Open Mic Its Not Very Good So Dont Hate Too Much On It But Leave Some Honest Feed

.Past,Present,Future.

Tell Me Is The Future Simply Leading Into A Theiving Abyss
If So Is It Questionable If The Present Really Even Exists
Forget The Past..If You Claim It Matters Your Lieng And Your Actin'
'Cuz Theres No Such Thing As A Memory Till' Someone Reminds You That It Happend
Memories Can Die By The Second As Long As In Your Mind It Was Pleasent
Life Consist Of The Future..Until The Earth Is Still Then You'll Die In The Present
But If The Past Is Meaningless..No Matter What You Ever Preach And Sing
Why Can You Never Live It Down...If Your Past Will Never Mean A Thing
The Past Is Only Significant To Make You Regret What You Feel
So Maybe Everything Is There For A Reason..Its Even Possible The Present Is Real
But How? Time Doesnt Even Stop Reactin With Regret In The Air
Is It Ethical That Maybe For A Fraction Of A Second The Present Was There?
Look Only Foward Never Back So Every Time You Breathe It Depicts You
No Matter Past Or Present..Make Sure You Prepare For Your Future........
...........Its The Only Thing Thats Guarenteed To Be With You

[Eccentric.]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=271046
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...70#post3935270

[V.I.G]

creative with alot of emotion included in the piece. You had some straight vocab & a good all round flow.

[Eccentric.]

Thanks For The Feed B.

[Mer Kumual]

Very Very Short, Rhyme Skeme Was Meh, Nothing Special With The Vocab, But In Emotion And Imagery Wise This Was Ight... Pretty Good For A 1st Om.

[V.Thadon]

more of a story piece....decent vocab...

had an alright line to this....the structure at some parts were a little strecthed...which stretched the flow

but its alright.....decent read.

[Mariposa Latina]

it was a good story piece like he^^^said & i think ur overall emotion and vocab was str8--
it's good 4 ur 1st OM; it's all about using ur xperience 2 elevate ur topic
Never try 2 speak on shit ur not familiar wit, thats what made dis tyte
i think if u work on ur refining ur topic dis piece could b better...u's def got potential!
keep postin and elevate each time--props 4 ur 1st post

Return the feed if u getz the chance tho, Gracias!
-Mari
"Letter From A Ryder"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=270190

[Eccentric.]

Thankz 2 All.

Uppin For More.