First drop in Open Mic

[MicrophoneFiend]

Man Im faded as hell, stoned off my ass watchin David Chappelle/
You wastin my air cuz in smoke outs is the only time Im takin a "L"/
I got bacon for sale, bright green trees, red pills and white rocks/
Hydro in a ice box, thats so potent when you smoke it both your eyes pop/

Get your life lost when I toss slugs in your mug, make ya cheeks melt/
And yall aint doin shit, the only strap you got on is your seat belt/
Start chokin you like Spreewell, Im the devil in street clothes/
Just smoked 3 bowls now Im high enough to look down on Yao's free throws/

Im Dangerous as angel dust when I aim and bust, result your brain is dust/
Battle with the heavens, shoot weapons and leave they halo's crushed/
I spit lyrics at the speed of light, when Im high like stars and astros/
Blast at ya crib, my fashion is grim, I got a heart darker than assholes/
Takin another toke off the glass bowl, roll up the strawberry swisher/
Mix that with a few shots of liqour, now Im fadin away like Derek Fisher/
My verses are sacred scriptures, they blessed like people sneezin'/
And for no apparent reason, I could drop a rhyme hot enough to change the season/

[EyeCandy]

Get your life lost when I toss slugs in your mug, make ya cheeks melt/
And yall aint doin shit, the only strap you got on is your seat belt/

^^^like dem.. haha!


hmmm yeah niice, like tha way u wrote dis shiit... good wordin, vocab, & flow was good 2... niice shiit comin from a new cat aswell.. stay @ it....
don't 4get 2 post ur links aiite........1

[MicrophoneFiend]

Gotchu.. yea im new to da site but I been around the game for years. Im a member on a few diferent boards. Was checkin dis out the other night and seen a few dope lyricists on here. What you mean post my links tho? Good look on the feed tho... but I need more

[EyeCandy]

leave feed 2 two other o.ms & post tha links in this o.m other wise dis will get closed.. better stil read tha stickes & u'll no aiite...
check mine if ya want.. they in my sig...

[GrimmyReaps]

say main that was nice i liked ya structure was doubles and ya metas

I got bacon for sale, bright green trees, red pills and white rocks/
Hydro in a ice box, thats so potent when you smoke it both your eyes pop/

that was a nice little rhyme and i know how ya feel say its a good verse tho

Check my oms out

[~MVL~]

word fam this was a nice drop you had a lot of new concepts in this, alot ive never thought about, you had some decent vocabulary and alot of multies, it wasnt a really forced flow for once it seems like this was a real flow and you kept it going,

Im Dangerous as angel dust when I aim and bust, result your brain is dust/
Battle with the heavens, shoot weapons and leave they halo's crushed/

that was a Nice bar, i would rate your verse as 9/10 keep workin at it to get perfect, if you can hit my om in ma sig thx

[MicrophoneFiend]

Two links:

Http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...2&page=3&pp=15
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...=1#post3937524

[MicrophoneFiend]

Helium

[..IllThoughtZ..]

instead of insulting you with heartbreaking rants...i will jus let you know this piece was not very gudd...my advice to you is to read other peoples OM's and try to be more complex and indepth with topicals...in other words use higher vocab....but ironically the structure of this piece is better than half the pepole on RB which isnt sayin very much...but take my advice and you will elevate at a high rate....good luck

[MicrophoneFiend]

^^ Yea I hear what you sayin but this wasnt mean to be in depth topical... it was just a quick keystyle... good look on the feedback tho... 'preciate it

[Johnny 6-feet]

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