Im new and trying to make a name

[Essentialsix999]

West side is where I reside
Essential is here to provide
wit u with the most essential
since ive been doing this thang ive heard i got potential
yea no need to hate
just await for me to create this state
of real words
I'm aint giving u all just two-thirds
How u gonna say I aint got skillz
u the cracker from beverly-hills
I sell more raps then cadilacs do devilles
Yea u c im just making a name
a name that i can proclaim
a name 2 put in the fame
if u wanna put this name 2 aim
go ahead, cause im so much higher
this shit is so i can aquire my desire
to take fire so all yall better retire
yea u can call me sire
hold on im almost done
nevermind ive just begun
ive been rappin since they shot my loved one
its been raining for so long i havent seen the sun
and finally essential is done


I really want comments on this!

[Essentialsix999]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...22#post4140122

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=279958

here are my links

[UndefinedKing]

Nice rap bro we shud battle some time

[Essentialsix999]

Nice rap bro we shud battle some time

thanx man, will do

[Plain-Thug]

rhyme ethic was pretty good probably the most stand out thing in this peice...
topic was alright..didn't seem like u put thought and creativity into this..it seemed plain
anyways the flow was pretty descent...it was descent continuesly throughout and it didn;t fade much at all....vocab and complexity was lacked and u need to work on that..overall u got potential keep working at it...peace homie

[SpitFire20]

yo Im young i know but u gotta stay on topic stay with one subject and dis the crap out of it then move to a new piece of work there's a few things in that song where u could branch off and make a few others raps on.

[Bounce]

This not meet requirements. Elevate and come back, read and follow the rules. Your links were not good enough. This really does not meet the level of drop we want in OM.