My life, some real sick shit off the top

[DimeBag101]

Yoyo
my lifes fucked, so im droppin rhyme bombs to pass the time on
my minds gone, fried like ozzies, im a kamikaze strapped to a time bomb
im fuckin hot,
my lyrical solar flares can melt a polar bear
and homie, i roll big, with 22's on my roller chair
im aware of this skill, but ayo, my life is a BITCH
so if you're lookin for a mill, high lifes in the fridge
i got my crew strapped nigga, we all suited for war
ill leave you on IV, like the roman numeral four
you think its a joke when i smile with this knife to your throat
ILL FUCKIN KILL YOU, hell, ill even write you a note
im violent, a little silent, but ill snap at you fast
my personality's cruel, you might expect me to back stab your ass

[chitown_mex11]

''i got mah crew strapped nigga, we all suited for war
ill leave you on IV, like the roman numeral four''
that was a tight line, the rest aint as good but itz still straight, i like the rhyme scheme, keep it homey~l8er

[CrosT Over]

this needs a lot of work , you had some descent wordplay throughout, but try to come a little more aggresive with your style, work on completely rhyming your end words this is text, we can't hear your slang, other than that you had some descent metaphors but try to use a better set up for them, paint a picture with your words!

[mindstyle]

elevate man, this isnt very good + u need 2 links to let us comment it, cuz otherwise the mods will close it..

[Poeta Demonio]

Dude atleast put feeling into your writting, elevate.

[~MetaSin~]

okay your life is nothing to write about if your not going to put emotion in tooo it elevate please

[Killa_King]

Shit was simple had an okay rhyme scheme to it I thought,but damn it was lacking a little emotion to it a little more imagery,could have been better,keep spittin though keep practicing you will get better over time 100 my nig

[Tru-Menace]

nice drop.........

[juvi]

Pretty simple drop man no hate but you need to elevate man. You did have some good metaphors and some of your lines were tight but, still pretty good but you can improve alot.

[M-A-D]

man you listin to a lot of eminem dont you?
wont you jest think for a minute lets see
the LP infint jst a few i picked up on
good stuff though sound like an elefant gone worng