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    Make it Ryte

    VERSE1
    this is a story about a boy who wanted fame
    all he wished is for people to recognise his name
    he didnt know that having all of these luxuries
    will break him down and make him crazy just like this
    because this whole world a one big fucked up system
    people havent got no control so theres no one to blame
    but everything you do is controlled by the goverment
    even my life aint full its never a hundred percent
    but this boy who thought that he could make some rhyme
    was working real hard so someone will get him signed
    didnt need no physical work because he can use his mind
    and all his hustling, gun smoking past just left behind
    even tho some things are so deep they leave a mental scar
    that lasts your whole life it dont matter who you are
    one thing he didnt realise is that he was with the wrong crew
    deep motherfuckers who kill people for saying thank you
    CHORUS
    its a shame that we kill each other
    all starting from dissing your own mother
    paying people to do the job u dont wanna do
    stop it homies or money will kill you too
    its a shame that we kill each other
    all starting from dissing your own mother
    paying people to do the job u dont wanna do
    stop it homies or money will kill you too
    VERSE2
    the boy went through alot of shit just to get in
    killing an innocent woman and peeling off her skin
    just after raping her and breaking all of her ribs
    thats how much it cost to get his brand new crib
    him and three more of his boys followed her to an alley
    then jumped her and gave her that harsh finalee
    he put a bullet straight into her bleeding head
    not knowing it was his homies mother covered in red
    now how the fuck things like that be forgotten about
    his heart got real cold that he is now left without
    he gave himself to devil all just for the fame
    so now his soul will burn forever in the hells flame
    because once he did that there is no way to get out
    no matter if he tryes to disagree, scream or shout
    he is stuck its just his body that is still alive
    his afterlife future is clear just waiting to him to arrive
    CHORUS
    its a shame that we kill each other
    all starting from dissing your own mother
    paying people to do the job u dont wanna do
    stop it homies or money will kill you too
    its a shame that we kill each other
    all starting from dissing your own mother
    paying people to do the job u dont wanna do
    stop it homies or money will kill you too
    VERSE3
    most people who are famous and got lots of money
    will end up just like that boy, their future aint sunny
    dont take it as and offence or not even a diss
    i only want all of the people to realise this
    this life is nothing compared to your afterlife
    its just a one huge test of your soul and mind
    there is no need to kill people in a stress
    you better chill and spread the good word then be blessed
    and live forever enjoying heaven and flying in the sky
    so if someone tells you to kill jus say no way in reply
    im trying to make it big but not to get sucked in
    im gonna do my best not to let that begin
    if someone wants to shoot me then take the shot
    im not gonna run i will stay glued to my spot
    and if you dare to take my life infront of your squad
    i will die a human not a killer and live forever near God
    CHORUS
    its a shame that we kill each other
    all starting from dissing your own mother
    paying people to do the job u dont wanna do
    stop it homies or money will kill you too
    its a shame that we kill each other
    all starting from dissing your own mother
    paying people to do the job u dont wanna do
    stop it homies or money will kill you too

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    Well, it's good to see someone start. Fight off, it seemed too simple. Throw in multis and a better vocab. Make the scheme more interesting. No more one sylable rhymes. All in all not bad for a beginner.

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