Just Dont Quit

[Dark_Shadow]

In Life you'll make mistakes, as we all do,
And it seems like u don't have enough to even make due
Your Faith may be low, and the tide real high,
And you can't get above water no matter how hard you try.
If u feel at the end and say, "This is it",
Stop and take a breather , but just never quit.
Your Journey may be full of twists and curves.
But if you hold on tight, you can make it through the swerves.
If you stay the course when you're down and out,
You may Be amazed at how quickly things turn around.
Dont give up before the race is done,
Just Take on Step....and then another one.
The End is near, though it appears to be far,
You'll be surprized to know how close you are.
Here's something to recall when your path is darkest lit:
it's always darkest before dawn,
And you can make it if u just dont quit.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=287386
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/memb...oster&t=287859

[Dark_Shadow]

uppin 4 sum feedback

[Dark_Shadow]

Rize

[So.Fist.Acated]

meh it was okay... nothin specail really, it was kinda short, vocab needed some work, structure was alright but coulda used some touching up... the whole idea of the piece was alright but i think you should try and pick a more complex and difficult topic to portray your full capabilaties. the rhymes were on point but i didnt c very much multies. i noticed that you attempted some wordplay that turned out alright but atleast ur trying... keep it up and keep elevating...

[Dark_Shadow]

oh Yea u owe me a battle my nigga

[So.Fist.Acated]

dont worry we will
i almost got 100 post
then i'll get my credz up
right now gotta worry bout
my crew battle

[Dark_Shadow]

uppin 4 more FeedBack

[kpwilsp]

I like it, but there's nothin really special bout it, but its short, simple, and motivational. Maybe coulda used more complexity, but its simplicity maded it appeal to me. Next time use some multi's and more complex flow and vocab; also use a more complex subject matter.

[Chozn1]

Kind of a played concept, but nice.

Work on make all your lines the same length or at least the rhyming lines the same length. Use some more intricate vocab to paint a picture of what your saying.
6.5/10
Keep elevating.
peace

[Plain-Thug]

it was alright i guess no complexity,vocab,imagery what so ever way too simple and short..this wasnt interesting to me and the rhymes were too simple man..no multies in here...topic was aight i guess...overall this wasnt all that good man for many reasons just keep at it..peace~

[Nicasso]

Basic Drop Flow Was Dope wordplay decent you did a good
job.......some tip's to improve would be come more creative
I'am sayin it was there but could of been way more creative
man.....Overall nice drop your flow is what made me keep
readin nice............................Keep up the good work and
like your drop's tittle Just Dont Quit...............................