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Thread: Dreams FEAT. -IsIs-

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    Soule
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    Dreams FEAT. -IsIs-

    ...The Rapper...

    I live my life meek, speak of dreams and it makes me
    think of the cats I know who aint here to praise me
    I feel its my duty, to respect them here an yet
    It's uncomprehendable why Im still fearing Death
    I feel corresed, blessed internally for my givin mind
    understand that life, could be takin any time
    many crimes, blinds cats from what I hold dearest
    the cold fear this, the emotion Im the clearest
    the ink tears this, Im the nearest to my dreams
    competing emcees battlin teams for the green
    it seems serene to me, but others feel its garbage
    but on this, they've never seen the visual carnage
    word is bond kids, the life for me is changed forever
    the rap thing I do, could never repair me better
    I spit my heart, sons, everytime I feel its necessary
    transform my soul into rhythm only thought legendary
    Contort microphones, until my vocal cords broken
    nothing else in life but to open the doors Ive spoken
    Forget the notion of postin this in The Hall Of Fame
    I dont want props from wack cats anymore its all a shame.


    ..The Wrestler..

    The enemy that cant see my one and only plea to be
    A wannabe that just got out of prison, am I the key
    He hits the finisher, but I feel no pain or remorce
    So I hit him with a force that has no painfull intercource
    He falls head first into the campas, creating tears
    He fears that he is hurt, a broken chance to cheers
    His useing record gives me a title shot, in return I get hot
    I will not skip this chance to advance and show every one what I got
    It's my dream to be champion and rename my familes legacy
    If I win the battle I'll got out back with divas drinking hennesi
    My father grants me good luck, I want to know if this is luck
    Or if my Dreams are getting granted by god, What the fuck
    I relize that my dream has come true, the title is stripped
    I'm given the title, I go to grab it but only to get tripped
    By the former champion and beat down, To the ground
    I frown and look around, no one dares to help, I make a sound
    Every time I try to stand I get punched, I get a hunch
    That I am getting robbed, I'm loseing blood but how much
    This is a story that proves beggers cant be choosers
    But in return, they become the hated and the losers


    This proves that People dont always reach their dreams.
    But most of them get close, but die off into screams.


    -IsIs- is the 1st
    I am the second

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    yo nice drop son. ill drop 2 links in a sec.
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    The R.
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    Fucking Rise.

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    word is bond.^^

    uppin for feed.
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    upp.

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    Mad sleepin on this shit for real.
    uppin for feed.
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    IsIs- Alright, I can feel where your coming from. Nice verse, stayed consistent, flow is on point and the emotion from you is strong. Very Nice. Nice shit on the syallable count, kept the me (reader) in a rhymthitic pace.

    Cassidy- Ok verse, I expect more from you. The imaginary was cool, bu tyou need to put down more details than that. To me there was a little emotion from your character but it wasn't enough to wow me or impress me. It seems like this is your first time or something or you've never really thought over your verse. I say this was an ok verse, next time, use more details and feelings with great wording and good choice of words. As of right now..Ok verse, keep writing.

    This was a good collab, but I felt IsIs Out-Shined Cassidy. Cassidy ok verse, but like I said on top. Keep writing, I expect more from you Cassidy.

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    I just felt entirely disconnected from both verses the entire time, a large part actually, was due to the fact you put who did which verse at the bottom. So I don't even know whos work I'm reading until the end, so you lost a very personal touch with the reader right off the bat. Also, I felt like both, but more specifically Isis was just too casual with his wording and vocabulary. Rather than it feeling like it was staying true to a character it just felt amatuerish and as if you don't even have any type of intellectual capasity to write something with thought provoking substance and vocab. Overall, I just felt that this wasn't wasn't very developed, and coupled with a concept that is overly abused the piece just had no chance from the start. Sorry guys, keep at it.
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    Rise

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    Good collab.......both verses were very good....good structure..good flow...good rhymes...good emotion throoughout especially the first verse..that one was tight.,..second one was just good.....overall nice topic good collab...i liked it..peace~

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    Thnx and rise.

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