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    Never Thought The Same

    Darkness Broad, Sitting by The Fire Praying To God
    I Do This Ceremonial Manner Ever Night For A Hobby
    Ever Since I Got A Dog, I Kept Glancing At The Lobby
    I Couldn't Think Straight, The Dog Was Making Racket
    I Couldn't Stay Focused, Always Had To Put On My Jacket
    Always Got Cold, Never Could Consentrate The Right Way
    Everything Was A Distracting Display Then Soon I Felt Dismay
    Nothing Ever Seemed To Flow My Way, It Was Always Choppy
    People Thought My Life Was Perfect So They Tried To Copy
    But They Realized It Wasn't All That Perfect, Not Even Swell
    Basically It Was Thought To Be Equivalent To The Place Hell
    Noted My Problems In My Diary, Trying To Sort Everything Out
    But First I Had To Learn What Was All These Problems About
    I Attempted To Relax, Sat Back In My Chair Sipping Ginger Ale
    Suddenly It Hit Me, Problems Started Coming After I've Been To Jail
    That Changed Me Dramatically, Almost Turned Into A Tragety
    The Doctors Saw Me Depressed, They Knew It Was Sad To See
    Never Thought The Same Ever, Different Moods Flood My Mind
    I've Always Been A Thug Looking For Some Love All The Time
    Looking For A Girl To Be Mine, But I Could Never Take The Facts
    Mind And Sight Blurry, Couldn't See Straight, This Wasn't An Act
    I Could Never Think Straight Because I've Been To Jail And More
    In The Past, I Hid Shit Under The Floor, I Used To Be A Drug Addict
    But I Stopped ,But Now The Outcome Is I Can't Think The Same
    Everyday I Got To Face The Hurtfullness Of My Brain And The Pain..

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    upping^^

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    I liked your topic though it took me a while to get, and you had great flow. SOme of the rhymes seemed a bit forced while others worked perfectly, and some of the lines didn't quite fit in or make sense. I would work a little on clarifying your message and organizing the structure a bit, but overall a decent read. hit this up if you get the chance: http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...40#post4607640

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    thanks and yea i'll hit that link up np

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