Addictions

[Nahlidge]

Now shorty, she was one of a kind
Wasn`t your ordinary girl, nah, wasn`t just one of the dimes
Now she, only came around some of the time
But got hotter than summer time, some of the times
And some of the time, she was cunnin` and sly
Had me seein` shit that wasn`t real, mouth runnin` and lyin`
I didn`t sweat it, maybe I didn`t get
Cuz I never thought twice bout where this was headin`
I was a, lost boy just livin` the high life
Used to be a super star standin` in the lime light
Damn, it`s funny what she do to a nigga
When the clouds start cryin` gettin` rude with a nigga
Missin` oppurtunity, figure, a broken heart
Floatin` on a broken yacht, tryna walk on water
Tryna, walk on farther but I`m stuck behind addictions
Wanna break free for anybody tryna listen

Same problem, different story now
No longer gettin` faded, rehabilitated, fuckin` with a shorty now
But shorty say she got another man
And the only time I`m jealous, when she got `em in her hand
See the problem with this man is, he like to poke her
Cuz shorty here, ain`t just your average smoker
She try to tell me that the feelin` ain`t the same
Goin` all out of her way just to feel `em in her veins
And that feelin` I can`t claim, but, she say she love me
Caught without a parachute, fallin` for a junkie
Fuck, damn I been down this road
And I, thought what a nigga found was gold
But, shit I guess I was wrong
Still I gotta help her, cuz together we can weather the storm
Escapin` the rainy night, catchin` the summer breeze
Man, fuck it, the say misery enjoys company


Verses from a track I did last week. I should have it up soon.

[The Vortex]

uhm? all starting rhymes are waay basic............diddnt really pull me in w/ da feeling of things........... flow was real n illy tho f'sho.......piece picks up as well as i go on n sum emotion does flood the page.......... vocab was ok still used well ane worded ace for clarity........ vocab coulda been a lil mo boosted i reckon...... yeahcan work for real if u drop the auidio correct.

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[GREVISS]

it sounds like a audio two...that some of the time shit
shud sound ill...yerr think i'll wait for the track...
not familiar wit the way you break ya words up...
and im wondeing what the poke her line means...
drop alink in here when ya track drops...peace

[Nique.]

i usually hate simplicity, but i can always vibe with yours because it's always so real no matter what your topic is. you got a real laid back style i can read on any day, during any time constantly. this was a pretty simple concept about your feelings for a female and the complications you are going through dealing with her, and your feelings. simply put: i liked it. catchy. cool shit Nah.

[STAY-Z]

And that feelin` I can`t claim, but, she say she love me
Caught without a parachute, fallin` for a junkie

lol^
feelin the ish in your verses, would be a cool track flow wise
some nice mix ups and switches on the flow
rhymes may be simple but the statments being made
7/10

[Nahlidge]

Good looks on the replies.

[Nahlidge]

The audio of it is up.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...00#post4730100

[Bounce]

I thought this was dope, and since the concept of addiction is fresh in my head (OM before last), it helped.


smooth, this will be nice recorded, but I thnk a few are not going to feel this outside of audio.. I loved the poke line, and the parachute/junkie line. Classic way to describe the situation, and nice set up with the first person going through then revisiting the life through a new found addiction so to speak. Nice. Simple or not, the subject is not to be taken lightly, so I see it for what it's worth.

I'll peep the audio in a bit...