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  1. July 30th, 2006, 02:26 AM #1
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    Unknown Talent

    Unknown Talent

    My body trembling, blood rushing in all directions of my body
    Butterflies trapped in the midpoint of my stomach fluttering
    Its wings as I memorize the lyrics to this song as the crowd
    Stands in silence before I make my presences on stage, Shroud
    In fear promising myself none mistakes what so ever. Beat
    Begins and DJ introduces me before stepping my feet
    On stages, hearing no sounds of hands clapping or any voice
    Shouting a positive reply. The light falls on me, I make my choice
    To spit some lyrics. Out of know where words flying out my mouth
    As I shout out loud the sounds of a true artist with talent, turning south
    Of the crowd spitting hot lyrics in away I never have expressed
    Amazed noticing the crowd jumping, they repeat my name. Possessed
    With the talent of an unknown artist with the heart burning for Success
    Crowd wanting more of this amazing talent that I have just transgress
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  2. July 30th, 2006, 02:27 AM #2
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  3. July 30th, 2006, 07:20 AM #3
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    your avatar is annoying as fuck

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  4. August 2nd, 2006, 08:17 PM #4
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    tru but i like it

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  5. August 2nd, 2006, 11:01 PM #5
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    this is a ok pice and i think that you should of made it longer but its cool anyway


    so yeah stay up

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  6. August 2nd, 2006, 11:33 PM #6
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    The first half of this was pretty fucking dope. It kind of fell off towards the end due to improper use of vocabulary.. But all in all, not a bad piece. It seemed inspired at first.. Did this really happen? Was it you trying to motivate yourself? What was it? Just writing? No matter the inspiration, it was still a good piece.. Could have been longer though.

    Do me a favor and hit my piece up? I need some good constructive feedback... so don't hold back.


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