Short On Time.

Soule · February 14th, 2007, 07:52 PM

I
Type this
Poem in a hurry
For my time runs thin
And my fingers begin to bleed
As my veins pop out of my skin
My lungs collapse and eyes blinden
As my coffen closes and my skin itches
As my voice gasps and my muscles tighten
Witches put this curse on me, I dont see why
But knowing my death grows closer and closer
Leaves me in this box hurt and my eyes crying
A short poem for I have no more time left, thankgod
A dead writer out of Toledo Oregon suffocated..
Out of breath, my poetry left me a frawd.

Soule · February 14th, 2007, 10:22 PM

uppin over.

**urban legendz** · February 14th, 2007, 11:50 PM

Word this was a nice smootth read, it was rather short, but sweet nice simple vocabulary and imagery was on poin dition as up to par and the emotion was the only thing this poem really lacked...other than that this wasn't a really complex read.. and that wored well for this piece.

**urban legendz** · February 15th, 2007, 05:53 PM

Can you leave some quality feed on this

Soule · February 15th, 2007, 11:53 PM

Thanks.

**urban legendz** · February 16th, 2007, 12:03 AM

Word, don't forget to return the favor on my piece fam.

Soule · February 16th, 2007, 07:01 PM

Alright,.

**vocabz** · February 17th, 2007, 01:42 AM

Short but very simple vocab. But a good read, I guess... Maybe you can make something a little longer next time, so I can see more of an overall, hopefully. I dont know if I've replied to anything of yours in the Poetic Scriptures, but I know I have in Open Mic, I believe..... And you got good shit, better than this. No hate, just my opinion. But, I understand, its for the poetry heads, lol.

Soule · February 17th, 2007, 11:25 AM

I've made to many peices to count. Miost are WAYYY longer then this..theres a reason I made it short. Maybe to go with the topic

. Thanks for the feed.

**Cody Nash** · February 18th, 2007, 12:59 AM

decent, not as good as some of your stuff but decent. i liked the wording and stuff a lot better than most of your solo pieces, but other than that it seemed like a short suicide letter and the basic point of it was kind of played out. you weren't too creative, but this seemed like a good practice for increasing your vocabulary level. so again i say, decent piece.