..I peer up at the white sun.
A galaxy unwinds from my puzzling gaze,
And just as stars crowd the milky way..
That one dream I've always had,
Is my only purpose in life.
A nervous night creeps upon the figure of day
Like a black dress on a pale complexion,
My soul lifted by creatures of the sea
I am trolleyed to land.
^ Nice i liked that, i thought it was the best part out of the whole thing. your approach i thought was very good here and your emotion was nice ans smooth throughout, your flow was on notch. I don't really feel i know you or have seen anything you have wroite before unless you have an alias and i will look out for more in the future, this piece had good creativity and detail was good aswell, i have to agree with Mr. Write when he said you grabbed the topic because here you did you grabbed and strangled the fuck out of it and i have to say dope job.
-Thomas.