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  1. February 8th, 2008, 05:13 AM #1
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    Trapped Spirit

    Trapped spirit
    The world is at peace
    So it seems
    But i realise tha i'm fooling myself
    Why can't i do as i please?
    Without being internally oppressed
    Is life worth living?
    If every day goes by like I'm cursed
    I dream of a heavenly place
    Were every Being can dwell
    Without feeling as if they are in hell
    For this is because of our own doing
    that we are coaught in this predicament
    Freeing my trapped spirit isn't free
    Like a compliment
    Oneness is all i crave
    and fuck your comment!!
    I'm cemented to one mentality
    Until my grave
    I don't need your hospitality
    Coz i'm hyped and brave
    I risk being victimised
    In this corrupt world of ours
    Well i've had it
    To hell with it
    i'm unleashing my internal powers
    Since freeing my trapped spirit
    Will take a matter of hours
    Thats a risk i can take
    If it points out to getting my destined life back
    See this isn't a mic check
    If you thought it was then you're doomed
    Coz you are fake
    Your spirit has matured and bloomed
    So you have no hope against this gloom
    I'm found and can burst into a rhyme fit
    And embrace my newly found spirit

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  2. February 8th, 2008, 05:16 AM #2
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    Re: Trapped Spirit

    Here are the links:
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ed-359668.html
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ng-360161.html

    Upppinnnn^^^^^^^

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  3. February 8th, 2008, 05:18 AM #3
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    Re: Trapped Spirit

    I hope you enjoy this read

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  4. February 9th, 2008, 06:33 AM #4
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    Re: Trapped Spirit

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...er-360280.html
    ^have at this OM...







    okay, pretty decent... bunch of grammer errors, makes the flow of the piece kind of off... but it's okay for a sort of a starter... I like the concept, but to be honest that's a bit played. being trapped in a cage that's not letting you release your talents to their full extent... it's just kind of a used topic, and unless the content is COMPLETELY genious, which this wasn't... then it usually ends up being played out and already been said... a bit of originality here, and I can see you have a lot of potential in there... so just keep writing and keep reading into feedback and you can only get better...


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  5. February 9th, 2008, 02:59 PM #5
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    Re: Trapped Spirit

    yo thanks for that honest feed man.

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