Watch what you say(Cancerous diss)

[Mafioso.]

let me fuck around keystyle a lil bit with this herb nigga

Bitch you can tryda deny that your hulk but kid we see the gig.
so keep talking and I'll make you apologize faster than Mariah did.
scizzor's flow ya style is wat I cut threw no girl wants to fuck you.
they just wish ya ugly ass will HUSH like homey that u ducked too.
talk a lot but u never wanna battle cuz u know I'll make ya squad fall.
but callin u out is like gym class cuz u do more ducking than dodge ball.
I couldn't feel ya style or see ya talent even if I used all of my 6 sence.
and jookz get some stamps cuz I'ma put Can in a box like food shipments.
we ain't sleeping on you but lyrically you about to get ya dreams snatch.
cuz bitch if your cancerous then I must be a fucking nicotine patch.
so if you wanna get it poping we can go tonight I'll show the light.
cuz when I get mad I fight when can get's mad he write's another open mic.
got a couple cat's banned I think's it's time ya snitch ass feels the beam.
but might ass well call em clumsly rice...cuz all he does is spill the beans.
we no your a bigger bitch than ya mother so don't even tryda play thug.
and if I followed ya footsteps.....I'd prolly end up walking in a gay club.
what a waste of fucking lines on this herb that isnt even a vet.
and yea Jookz never had a father
but the only reason u still have one is cuz I haven't given up on u yet.


easy

[yungskeeme]

this was ok...had a couple lines I really like. Some of the lines felt forced. Good metaphor's though. Fav lines.

got a couple cat's banned I think's it's time ya snitch ass feels the beam.
but might ass well call em clumsly rice...cuz all he does is spill the beans.
we no your a bigger bitch than ya mother so don't even tryda play thug.

and if I followed ya footsteps.....I'd prolly end up walking in a gay club.
what a waste of fucking lines on this herb that isnt even a vet.
and yea Jookz never had a father
but the only reason u still have one is cuz I haven't given up on u yet

overall nice work

[Hush]

this aint bad at all, just overworded at alot of points, which hurts the read/flow..BUT some cool concepts like dodgeball/nicotine patch/open mic/follow footsteps


not bad man, just clean up your wording an you'll be writing at a higher level in no time.

[Baron Mynd]

this was pretty cool man, flow was straight, a few good lines in there and a few that seemed more personal that probably went over my head because I havent been around that much lately. I thought this was cool for a quick key though, I liked the dodge ball and Hush lines best.

Not bad at all, probably the first thing Ive read from you fam.

Keep that pen moving...

[Lil Dizzee Deuce]

I like this man. I dunno if you want feedback on the piece but i know how he keeps duckin you and it sorta needed something like this lol. Hes a bitch. That dodgeball line was funny, made me laugh, and also thee gay club line lmaoo. I liked it, ill hopefully see you finally battle the fucka soon. Hope you murda the bitch.

[Ay-T]

Damn that was disgusting (inna good way).

"got a couple cat's banned I think's it's time ya snitch ass feels the beam.
but might ass well call em clumsly rice...cuz all he does is spill the beans.
we no your a bigger bitch than ya mother so don't even tryda play thug.
and if I followed ya footsteps.....I'd prolly end up walking in a gay club."

^ favorite.

[.Prime.]

Really nice disses in there...

Bitch you can tryda deny that your hulk but kid we see the gig.
so keep talking and I'll make you apologize faster than Mariah did.

^ really liked this one, you had okay flow throughought the whole thing but it was pretty simple. I understand it was just a diss but it has room for improvement. Nice style though keep it up. Please RTF on my new open mic House of Flying Bullets

[Mafioso.]

werd uppin this shiznit