bring a gun to a knife fight.

[Supa.Ficial]

..
.

Pssh,

I'm colder than a carcass..
Stretching muscles older than my heart is.
I'd hatch a daft plan that was bolder than my stars wish.
..I once proofread the scrypts of a master craftsman.
& Ancient whispers painted pictures of a bastard half-man..
He was the soldier of Thor..
Cold as the rough skin of a tough kin like an ogre in war.
We met upon the fields of old..
With the stroke of my sword he fell.. & I felt the feeling grow.
I became a God of Gods.. a heathen soul.
Golden as I stand in the shower. So bright w/ my crazy shit.
The hand of a Power..
I'd sink a navy ship for the sake of it with a single wave of it..
Your rappin is token. I'm rappin like Tolkien -
Chattin w/ folk &.. I laugh in delight while smashin' the light,
Darkness leaves strength sappin & chokin..
Lord of the ring mindset. An outlandish finish ..
I banish spirits. Reach inside my own soul & have a stand off w/ it.
Like there ain't room for the two of us!
Ur losin' thus, Quit fumin' like a human. Ur translucent skin is bruisin up.
Expert of the dagger fight..
Hopeless.. You wouldn't even hear my cloak swish on a haggard night.
My sword swipe is nasty.
It soars up your alley.. broad, white & crafty. It's the end of a timelord.
Tick, tock. I was sent to destroy war.
Like what the hell did you try for?
Bringing a gun to a sword fight.. I'd kill you then fly, bored.

..
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[Supa.Ficial]

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[slipin420]

i liked that good metaphores, good storyline, read nicely, well done, keep droping

"I'd sink a navy ship for the sake of it with a single wave of it.."

^^ had to be my favorite line i like multi's like that

[Bad-MaN]

u got guns and swords?
i got vocal chords
never back down from lyrical wars
i may be white, but i'm known on the streets
for flowin mad nice on some really tight beats
u wanna face me there is no competition
prepare for battle
mobilize the troops
cuz i eat MC's like alphabet soup
im known for smokin rappers like purple haze
usually in a fuckin daze
rare to catch me sober
like ma older dayz.

[yungskeeme]

You started this of nice and finished it nice. The wordplay and vocab was sick. It was really smooth and went together. Nice.

[.Prime.]

Heh, I liked this. Great wordplay and use of multi's. The only thing that kind of needs improvement is your flow cause it was off on some bars but either way man nice drop.

[Baron Mynd]

lmaoooooo @ Bad Man's wack add-on though

wtf was that nigga doing ahahaha

this was cool bro, flowed smooth enough as i stuck with it but 'bolder than star wish' just sits real awkward with me for some reason. its wording is off there. it has something missing. i dunno.
'Colder as' the rough skin is another example off top i recalled. its just simple things, but they noticeable when its this clear you know what you doing. it had a keyed feel to it, like you banged this one out real quick, im not sure how wide of the mark i am with that assumption but im pretty sure you can do better when you do decide to bring it.

cool little verse. imma have to give you a raincheck on that collab...

[Supa.Ficial]

word dead. i just wrote because i havent in a long time. im peeved at the typos. smh.

[Hush]

I liked the content, but yo the rhyme scheme was wierd as fuck..

"He was the soldier of Thor..
Cold as the rough skin of a tough kin like an ogre in war."

wish it all flowed like that u LOTRetard

[Hush]

rofl@DW's boardname

[SHOK-VAL-U]

I'm colder than a carcass..
Stretching muscles older than my heart is.
I'd hatch a daft plan that was bolder than my stars wish.
yes
..I once proofread the scrypts of a master craftsman.
& Ancient whispers painted pictures of a bastard half-man..
yes
He was the soldier of Thor..
Cold as the rough skin of a tough kin like an ogre in war.
yes
We met upon the fields of old..
With the stroke of my sword he fell.. & I felt the feeling grow.
I became a God of Gods.. a heathen soul.
yes
Golden as I stand in the shower. So bright w/ my crazy shit.
The hand of a Power..
I'd sink a navy ship for the sake of it with a single wave of it..
yes
Your rappin is token. I'm rappin like Tolkien -
Chattin w/ folk &.. I laugh in delight while smashin' the light,
Darkness leaves strength sappin & chokin..
no
Lord of the ring mindset. An outlandish finish ..
I banish spirits. Reach inside my own soul & have a stand off w/ it.
yes
Like there ain't room for the two of us!
Ur losin' thus, Quit fumin' like a human. Ur translucent skin is bruisin up.
yes
Expert of the dagger fight..
Hopeless.. You wouldn't even hear my cloak swish on a haggard night.
yes
My sword swipe is nasty.
It soars up your alley.. broad, white & crafty. It's the end of a timelord.
Tick, tock. I was sent to destroy war.
yes
Like what the hell did you try for?
Bringing a gun to a sword fight.. I'd kill you then fly, bored.
yes

I'm colder than a carcass..
Stretching muscles older than my heart is.
I'd hatch a daft plan that was bolder than my stars wish.

He was the soldier of Thor..
Cold as the rough skin of a tough kin like an ogre in war

^ my favourite lines...even though 95% of the piece was dope..nice multies and flow,i havent read anything from you as of yet,but i hope you keep dropping.

multies 9/10
flow 9/10
lyrics 8/10

great piece... if you ever wanna collab hit me up...