Hate

[N.F.M.]

Hate...

It's zealousy...
And envious...
It's jealousy...
And emptiness...
It's talkin shit...
And havin fits...
It's tryna spit...
And lackin hits...

Hate...

It's what I am...
And what you aint...
It's what I can...
And what you cant...
It's what I have...
And what you dont...
It's what I've done...
And what you wont...

Hate...

It's where I stand...
And where you lay...
It's when I'm great...
And when you're gay...
It's where I move...
And where you stay...
It's what I do...
And what you say...

Hate...

[Mantra]

For every one poem you post in Poetic Scriptures you are required to leave a reply on two others. Each reply must consist of acceptable feedback, or your thread will be closed. Upon completion of this requirement, please then post/edit the links to your replies in(to) this thread to prevent any confusion or mis-communication between yourself and staff.

[lostinlove]

Wes, I have to disagree, cause I love you. So no hate from me. Only love.

[N.F.M.]

First off, Mantra... I watched that little Youtube rap video in your signature. It was very interesting. I like the beat, I like the camera effects. I even like the message. Pretty tight for someone I've never even heard of.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...765/index.html

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...218/index.html

[The Stoned Raj]

lol..."little Youtube rap"...thats the next powerhouse in rap you better get up on Odd Future

[N.F.M.]

Not much of my style, honestly...

I'm still stuck on my southeastern rap...

Wasn't bad though...

[Mantra]

I appreciate you getting the links but I need you to elaborate on your reply to this poem:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...765/index.html

...otherwise I can't count it towards the requirement.

And just so you know, it's necessary that you be fairly detailed with your replies when leaving feed in here, by rule and just as a courtesy to other writers...you can take a look at the feedback made by others in that to get an idea of what i'm getting at.

[ItoldUIwasFat]

hmm seems like you rushed this and put this together in less that a few minutes....
if thats the case then you didnt put to much effort into this. almost feels like you keyed this up right before you posted it.
with that note, this feels like an unfinished rap rather that a poem.
it didnt have any depth or to much imagery i mean i dunno how to reply to this. for me it didnt have enough in depth content

And when you're gay...
It's where I move...

? so your moving towards gay people or away? you see the confusion

ok drop wasnt my style maybe giving the reader more to read would capture more replies...this just seemed half assed