Originally Posted by
Basic M
ya pedo style is so weird, n ur bromances r so queer
ur stay here's been childs play, u've been Mr. Herbert to Lenny allllllll year
Multi rhyme scheme attempt is bad. If you are going to scheme, ensure you are using 3 or more syllable rhyme patterns. 2 are just basic and terrible. Punch was mediocre at best, tho.
see i always drop heavy, pussy u've never dropped anything steady
those flips take a drastic dive, guess ur parachute cord wasnt ready
I liked this. However wording hindered the impact. "Guess your parachute wasn't ready" - the guess killed the impact a lot man. Would have landed more effectively without the word "Guess". - you know what I mean? Would have been harsher without the GUESS in there is what I am saying.
if i catch u in the dark its over, come to ur hood n let the tech ring
mama said run home when the street lights up, it aint just a "black thing"
Street light concepts are pretty dated. The execution on this was soft anyways tho.
see ur hood cred is lacking, while everyday M's out here trapping
the only time u ran opponents off the block, was at ur high school track meet
This was decent. Basic but direct and effective. No extra shit involved.
n dude u need to improve, one slip up n dawg im lookin' to bruise
this can end in the blink of an eye, n when im finished thats all u'll be able to do
Blink of an eye correlated with being crippled is pretty dated. I've seen a lot of these concepts thrown around in my tenure man.
I even used a blink of an eye concept back in like season 16 but my execution had more or so to do with Butterfly kisses LOL.
NBL legend edition too dope, yet u'd rather beat scrubs & some new folk
the leagues been crying out to you, it came w/ a radio held up at ya window
I think you could have done better with this. Execution lacked everything... Way to open ended and was not harsh by any means,
IMO.
real life i'd leave u leanin', u'll get sidelined when i bring the beam in
trust me once i red shirt Bdot, u can bet ur life he wont be back next season
Again, multi scheme attempt game is weak. FUck 2 syllables man, step it up a little bit and challenge yourself, if that is how you are going to write your verses. Punch was weak but a good multi scheme could have helped is where I'm going.
if i let that riffle sing, trust me buddy, it can be a scary thing
i've got folks that'll clap behind u till its dark, u'd think it was the conjuring
Don't like this.
using facebook to stalk ur opponents, who needs that to be a threat? YOU!
wanna play private I like Luke Cage? well i hope these bullets bounce off ur chest too
This was ok but wording was shaky. "Hope these bullets bounce of........" The word HOPE killed the impact/effectiveness bro. You have to be careful how you word your punches. 1 word can throw the whole punch out the window and in this case, 2 bars were killed by words you shouldn't have used. It would have been more effective without the word "Hope".
n ur style just isnt raw, my game makes you seem like a fraud
every shot you take makes u look more like a bust, i though u were Lonzo Ball
Don't like this. Sports refs have to be executed with a mean insult or else is bland to me.
u barely scrapped by in our last battle, that to me just shows ur all hype
he cant manage a loss from me, this ass whippin'll leave all his dick riders on strike
Needed more of a harsher execution or witty concept. Way to simple, basic and generic.
bro u stay on some bitch shit, n u just arent gifted
the only time u'll see Dot touch a target, is if its done from a distance
Simple but effective, this one was ok.
bro ur threats are all wack, toughness? yeah thats the shit that u lack
i mean we know u wouldnt say anything Krucial, he made u his bitch in the chat
Nah... Simple but not effective. This type of reference needs some wit and harshness to go with it in order to land effectively.
my hands could bruise u up, i dont need guns to show that im a thug
if i air the toasters on Bdot, it'll be after i've dropped them both inside the tub
Lol, this was ok.
n ur modding is so light, ur supervision just aint tight
u'll go down in history as the 1st textcee to ruin a league, on BOTH sites
This was terrible.