WK9: $pitacular vs R A O ($PIT WINS)

[Bag Mandela]

WK9

Punches due: Saturday 11th October

Voting ends: Tuesday 14th October

Who knows the rules, I don't, refer to the rule thread.

@$pitacular @R A O

[R A O]

I'm a shoe in; you're lacking polish like alcoholics on their sixth wine.
If you're ever lacing em, it's me giving him the boot the only time we gonna see Spit shine

[$pitacular]

Sigh.

leave you scarred/charred, quit trying to be offensive you sound queer
bitch just shut your mouth, nobody's feeling a hard R 'round here

[Blas]

RAO- one of ur better concepts, the wordy choppiness just hurts u, if u formulate a bar well with a concept like this ur gonna do a lot better, props for continually elevating either way

Spit- funny concept, calling him a hard R though as far as him being hard even as a joke makes it seem like ur kinda gassing him up, the rest is solid tho and it's worded well per usual

v/ spit

[Slayerr.]

Rao I liked the concept, spits probably gonna say he’s seen it 100 times before but I don’t care I rated it, think it could’ve been worded to hit harder though it didn’t feel that impactful spit came alright, hard r is a good flip coz rao is a hard name to flip so I rate it, again could’ve hit harder but was crisp enough and smooth enough for the w

V/spit

[Baron Mynd]

Meh battle to be honest, Spit with the slight edge even though he phoned it in. R A O made this a tough read. Nothing to see here from either.

Vote - Spit

[John Noir]

both were decent, thought spits name play flew off the tongue smoother. Didn’t love the concept.

v/ Spit
@$pitacular take me off ignore, I shot u a DM.

[Wordz AhGod.]

R O A, I feel like I've seen better concepts from you. I think the first thing that through me all the way out the window for your bar was the "6th wine" bit. Don't feel like that shit sounds natural. Not sounding natural I think is often allowed around here except when its for the purpose of forcing a rhyme. If you could make that part more natural, it's usually much more forgivable if everything before it isn't. Spits bar felt like he just didn't want to worry about if he showed up for this later. Either way, I think it was enough to secure the votes in this one.

v/spit.

[MV]

RAO was okay but i feel like you could have used that concept more creatively since spit shine has presumably been used 182132092348 times.Butt $pit had a solid punch that was funny and was a bit more to my liking in creativity and execution.

v/$pit

[Desmond Hume]

Rao, feel like I just read a similar concept in LLL, today. I didn't hate it tho.

Spit, hard R was easy but clean and landed.

Vote spit