New Shit

**K.I.D.** · December 12th, 2003, 10:08 AM

now when i spit shit pull ya skirt down nigga this is,
no time to show ya pussy don't be simplistic,
gettin hit wit bricks that spiral from the fists,
don't trip cause ya time is up and u blew that shit,
now fire comes from my mouth like mythological beasts,
lyrics pull a Thriller, make dead niggaz flock to da streetz,
bars scar, fuck who you are my bloods on the beat,
most of these niggas rappin are stale and stank like pops feet,
not alotta niggaz deserve the respect that they given,
gettin dick riders in they crew thinkin they spittin,
i know i struck a nerve niggas go ahead and rate me,
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**vanes** · December 12th, 2003, 11:58 AM

yeah just returning da favour

yo dogg i like yo shit, but itz way too short, ima seeing too much short pieces, just make it longer work harder on yo wordplay and elevate, plus you'll be much better if u always make the rap you gonna write tomorrow betta than tha 1 2day.

**Mistral** · December 12th, 2003, 03:27 PM

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed..

But this was ok....structure in this was pretty decent i thought...could have been a bit longer i think...flow in this was alright, got off at some points...vocab in this was pretty good, could be up'd a bit though...But keep at it.

**Newbie** · December 12th, 2003, 03:31 PM

damnn dat was sum hard $hit, liked it, it was very consistent, the beginning was a bit laid down but towards middle went good and da end was slick, refering bak to ur sig was a nice touch too.

Lewd · December 12th, 2003, 03:31 PM

i thought it was good.good flow and wordplay a little short but in order to do long u gotta learn to do short.overal i think it was good.keep elevatin