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    Quest

    It started when I embarked on my craziest quest
    I left home cos something missing was hurting my chest
    It was like I was fishing without hooks, line or nets
    Or reading an empty book with no spine or print set
    So I had to bet with the odds, they were better than best
    They were so high they’d score straight ‘A’ on a test
    And I didn’t want to die and not try……
    ………………………………cos it could manifest!
    So I thought I should stretch my horizon higher than it is
    Cos my sun was rising and setting without me having lived
    I’d not made my final bid… and it was about time I did!

    With my backpack on my back I made tracks
    All I had was some cash and the clothes in my rucksack
    And enough hash stashed to last about a month
    But I had a hunch what mapped past that packed a punch
    So I took the crunch, bit the bullet, left with no trace
    And my life quickly unfurled to a far smoother pace
    I was outta the rat race, while embracing a kinder place
    Tasting the high life, I wasn’t wasting anymore time
    Id chased happiness for so long, I could run the race blind
    Never mind I was there, all my cares disappeared in the air
    The fair weather was here… the storm was back there..
    ..Nowhere to be seen, like a dream when you awaken
    In its place clean living, apart from the drugs I was taking
    but it was replacing far worse than what I’d be facing
    I mean is being high under hot skies not better than faking?
    There’s no debating, I wasn’t happy, but it changed
    And if you’re relating to this id say, “life needs rearranged”…
    ...before you become deranged… so get out instead
    Cos if you don’t give it a shot, life will shoot you dead
    So use your head, I fled and its like what I said
    You make you bed and lie in it, so try to make it soft
    I did it for 5 years, and didn’t once feel id lost

    Then it clicked, yes id missed the real problem
    Running away doesn’t mean you’re gonna solve them
    Cos when it came down to it, exactly what did I obtain?
    Exotic views and better tan, but only a family by name
    I shouldn’t have ran, cos what was missing never came
    I thought it did, but the main shit remained the same
    It’s the way you play the game… I took work to serious
    Thought money was more important than it really is
    I became delirious through striving for far too much
    I’d lost touch with my family, so now I don’t push
    I clutch them close to my heart, everything else comes next
    And I like to call my quest a test to find my home address

    I went around the globe, in hope of happiness
    When all I needed was to take a close look at this?
    Look at what?….. The family I thought id never miss
    But I did… but now I’m back, and now my life is bliss





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    damn homie that shit was tight man i loved the beggining best part please return the favour for where are they now thanks

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    p.s. this is hall of fame shit if i knew how to recomend it i would

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    ^^you copy the link from the search bar and paste it in the nominations thread, with my name next to it, thats how you nominate it, ill reply to your OM son enough, just got a few things to do
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    This was pretty good.... sum lines that stuck out to me:

    "...before you become deranged… so get out instead
    Cos if you don’t give it a shot, life will shoot you dead
    So use your head, I fled and its like what I said
    You make you bed and lie in it, so try to make it soft
    I did it for 5 years, and didn’t once feel id lost"
    ^^dope

    "Then it clicked, yes id missed the real problem
    Running away doesn’t mean you’re gonna solve them
    Cos when it came down to it, exactly what did I obtain?"
    ^^nice..

    "It’s the way you play the game… I took work to serious
    Thought money was more important than it really is"
    ^^feelin it..

    Yea overall I would give it a 8.5/10...
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    thnx man
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    Yeah man, this was really nice.

    The first part got me hooked and i was really feeling the ending.

    Not your best piece, but man you're on fire and this is far better than most of the rest.

    I enjoy reading your stuff, I look for more of it in the future.

    Great Drop, Keep Them Coming

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    damn Dev you have a great story telling abilty you just know how to keep the reader wanting more and more great imgrey used and liking the way it all flowed throught the whole piece read it a couple times keep doing what you do best also had many quotbales in here as well

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    Nice shit no doubt...one of the better reads I've seen from you..and a good story to go along with it....emotional and a tad bit heart warming in some ways...lol...

    Quote Originally Posted by Best Lines From Char-Lee
    It’s the way you play the game… I took work to serious
    Thought money was more important than it really is
    I became delirious through striving for far too much
    I’d lost touch with my family, so now I don’t push
    I clutch them close to my heart, everything else comes next
    And I like to call my quest a test to find my home address

    I went around the globe, in hope of happiness
    When all I needed was to take a close look at this?
    Look at what?….. The family I thought id never miss
    But I did… but now I’m back, and now my life is bliss
    ^Your ending...you had nice thought, emotion, and good points towards here and this was the climax of your story in my opinion...good shit..


    BreakDown
    Metaphors - Very Good
    Emotion - Very Good
    Imagery - Very Good
    Vocabulary - Good
    Flow - Very Good
    Originality - Excellent
    Overall:
    I enjoyed reading this...you told a good story..and that's one reason why RB likes your skill....you are a great story telling..and I don't see why you've never decided to write a book or something similar to it....overall good read no doubt...


    Rating:
    9/10

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    word i love your topics broalways on point
    and fresh this was dope...made me want to readon here

    It started when I embarked on my craziest quest
    I left home cos something missing was hurting my chest
    It was like I was fishing without hooks, line or nets
    Or reading an empty book with no spine or print set

    also the ending was predictable but dopoely done...very nice man.

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    thnx guys... u.p
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    your content is always solid creativety is always peaking and u captivate readers im imprseed as always but you still suck my fat one .....lol u got this idea giving me brains......lol nah but all and all this was hot as expected.
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    thnx upp
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    lets get a couple more reads over here
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    This was a good read.

    I liked the enternal rhyme.
    it made it a lot easier to read. I'll try that on my next piece.
    the content was good. It was an enjoyable read.

    With my backpack on my back I made tracks
    All I had was some cash and the clothes in my rucksack
    And enough hash stashed to last about a month
    But I had a hunch what mapped past that packed a punch
    So I took the crunch, bit the bullet, left with no trace
    And my life quickly unfurled to a far smoother pace
    I was outta the rat race, while embracing a kinder place
    ^^^I really enjoyed that part, it stuck out i thought.

    Good piece.
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