uppin 3rd.....
Kwizikz
Rhetoric
uppin 3rd.....
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uppin 4th...leave a link & I'll vote..yo!
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I generally have to agree with pervious votes, Tragedy took this one. It wasnt a land slide but a safe win for him. The picture he painted had more detail and was more vidid and tangible..the adjectives used near the begining were great word choice
vote Kwizikz (Tragedy)
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nice!
rhe - yours was a little to heavy for my liking, i found myself reading a lil to fast in parts due to the stucture + flow of ur piece....didn't expect the suicide at the end tho, nice twist!
siphon - you imagery was all there and it really got me thinkin, ur piece def got to me more due to the style and overall flow. good drop, hope to be seeing more from you in the future.....keep it up kid!
overall - v/siphon
'Check it,
i grew up a fuckin scew up,
got introduced to the game got an ounce and fuckin' blew up.'
Originally Posted by Trahedy Siphon
trahedy very nice work every thing was on key here nothing wrong with this peice i enjoyed reading it and it was pretty dope.
keep up the great work
rhetoric this was all right could use some work in places but was pretty good other wise.Submerged, i can still hear her words, drowned out by the water
burned in my thoughts forever, the pleas of my helpless daughter
beneath the sea she was swept, i wept, fathoming how id lost her
i couldnt imagine my life without yet i had allowed her to wander...
...down on her knees building sandcastles, she laughed full of glee
relaxed i had cracked a smile watching , as she played happily
to me she was my all, i remembered thinking, the scene so serene
i must've fallen asleep, cuz i was awoken suddenly by her scream
almost surreal it seemed, horrified, i lept up frantically searching
starting to panic, i looked to Atlantic and saw her hand emerging
urging her to hold on, though against me the tide was workng
crying out to be saved, i prayed that she'd brave the waves surging
exerting all that i could, i swam , desperately trying to reach her
but i was too late, all that remained the pain of the three words
' i love you daddy', echoing sadly, the last thing that i'd heard
as she slipped below the surface my life's purpose became absurd...
..submerged it hurts so much w/o her, and i doubt that there's a day
gone by that i haven't yearned to tell her im sorry for my mistake
but nothing can erase the fact, there's nothing that i can say
nothing to take back what is done, so with this gun i'll ease the pain
*bang*............
this peice could have been worded better and more witty but you came all right but he just had that edge on you.
if you dont under stand me PM me.
V/ Trahedy
thank you
peace
this was dope...tough choice
Vocab- Trahedy...Rhetoric came with just a moe basic set of vocab
Flow- Trahedy...nice flow, Rhetoric your lines seemed al little stretched.
Emotion- Rhetoric..damn that was a nice verse
Imagery- Rhetoric...props man, that was deep
Enjoyable- Rhetoric...i felt yours overall
this was a dope battle. both came really nice. hard to choose. at first i thought Trahedy took this like nothing. but Rhetoric's verse put me in awe. the heart in that was enough to pull my vote. real close though. props to both. keep that ill stuff up.
vote- Rhetoric
peace
this was dope...tough choice
Vocab- Trahedy...Rhetoric came with just a moe basic set of vocab
Flow- Trahedy...nice flow, Rhetoric your lines seemed al little stretched.
Emotion- Rhetoric..damn that was a nice verse
Imagery- Rhetoric...props man, that was deep
Enjoyable- Rhetoric...i felt yours overall
this was a dope battle. both came really nice. hard to choose. at first i thought Trahedy took this like nothing. but Rhetoric's verse put me in awe. the heart in that was enough to pull my vote. real close though. props to both. keep that ill stuff up.
vote- Rhetoric
hit this up in return plz, its a topical also:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=127793
peace
damn. my bad for posting twice^ something is wrong with my comp. but yea, here was what i added though...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=127793
oh damn. i apologize. i kinda messed up on whos verse was whos. probably because the name of the therad is Kwiziks vs Rhetoric and i didn't even see a single post by Kwiziks. but yea...my vote was wrong. i thought Trahedy wrote the verse about the daughter and Rhetoric wrote the one about cheating and his wife. my bad. my mind is a messed. i'll send it to a mod to get the poll re-done. but could you still vote on that battle of mine plz^ its bein slept on badly. thanks.
peACE
^Fixed as requested
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yeah this was a close battle
both came alrite here but i think
trah just took it the reasons being
he had a far better view of the topic
and stayed consistent with amotions
i think reth had better vocab in generall
but didnt have that consistency to be honest
your flow was a lil of also but tis was a close
battle and i liked it but just vote goes to
ma man trah
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