early

[Handcuffs]

it's 6 o' clock and i just woke up/
get out a bowl and a coffee cup/
i grab the cereal and milk and put it into my bowl/
and put the cereal into the fridge where it is cold/
i put the milk in the cupboard, where it belongs/
i notice the smell when i get back from bein' gone/
i opened the cupboard, what did i see?/
some chunky ass milk, waitin' for me/
with anger i threw it in the street/
wonderin' how it got there, then i took a seat/
i don't remember gettin' out that stuff/
when i saw the cereal, i fucken had enough/
i stood on my table, with a rope around my neck/
kicked away the table and choked just a sec/

i hate monday mornins

[LM]

You ryhmed it well for a completely useless topic.
Vocab was good but I won't say up it coz your tellin a story and vocab aint that important.
To improve pick a topic which people will feel.
Overall 6/10

be sure to check out 'love you,hate you' when it drops....it's gon' be amazin

[C rocka]

lmfao this shit is aight playa it sounds like sum old school snoop doggy dogg shit because thats what he would rap about back then....its coo

[pot1ent]

This wasn't good at all.. It was one of the worst piece I've seen.. You could of taken this topic really quite deep & painted a picture.. Instead you brung it ever so basic.. = (

Pz.

[Maven.]

reply to three open mics, and post links to your replies here, otherwise this thread will be deleted.
thanks.

[pedro nok]

QUITE A WEAK PIECE............UP THE VOCAB AND GET A TOPIC 2 WRITE ABOUT

[Explict]

dawg you need to pick a topic..that way people would be more into it..your flow was aiight..your creativity was also aiight..use some imagary and vocab, then u'll be str8..6/10

return the favor: check my open mic's

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95506


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95629

[Jo-JO]

this was a tight piece but calm down playa DON'T CRY OVER SPOILT MILK ya herd