User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 3 of 3

Thread: The Brunt of Front

  1. #1

    The Brunt of Front

    So this one took me 1hr 11mins to write. I used my eraser 2 times. I looked no words up online for this one. I was just thinking about how errbody is always floss'in so I wrote it down.

    May I have some feedback on this one? In case you're too nice to reply, even if it, you likes, just give me a rating,
    1 to 5 mics.


    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
    Homie they know where you reside.
    Talk'in bout you represent the east side.
    You best duck and hide before...
    Them boys come and take your pride.
    See we knows you's a bitch, on the inside.
    Your time, you need to bide,
    Talk'in bout your grand slamming, listen Denny, you're bunt'in.
    You out there constantly front'in and stunt'in.
    Look it's three and out, time for punt'in.
    The other team got all the sacks,
    All you got is your pockets turned inside out, so relax.
    Else you might just end up at Clinton super max.
    Just as common as the Star Spangle,
    Punks always yapp'in bout they chain dangle.
    Me, I'm always rapp'in like Too Short & 4-Tay,
    and I never enter a situation, without checking all the angles.
    I know you're all about your monetary worth, the Net.
    That's how much money you tell people you have, via the internet.
    Talk'in bout you drip candy, listen Randy.
    I'll beat ya, like Timbo beat the drums, for Brandy.
    Always swing'in your ice while Killa Bees be swarming.
    Ice is melting, haven't you heard of global warming?
    I don't care if your kicks is white or free from scuff.
    Real women don't care, that ain't gonna help you track down no muff.
    However a fancy car might help, not a bucket,...
    A shit box or a beater.
    Just like, twenty inch plus rims always convince her to suck it.
    Out of your hood? I hope you brought a heater.
    I prefer a yaper, a scraper, ya know, a boat for big tuna.
    I'm knock'in so many fools out the Sumo circle, call me Yokozuna.
    Yo, I'm in the Bay, so: Gas, Brake, Dip, don't fake my paper.
    At the sideshow spot, tryna blend in, after my last caper.
    You always show'in out and show'in off.
    While I'm always flow'in stout and knowing how to take off.
    All the raps and errbody always floss'in.
    All the while homies be on Death Row,
    Why don't you bring yourself down to Crenshaw & Slauson?
    Fake thugs always hav'in beef, please.
    You need to cease, before you get deceased.
    Talk'in like that's your Tesla please, we all know you lease.
    We all know you ain't working with noth'in but the police.
    All the while I stay press'd up and creased.
    Time for me to start boasting, now I'm done maul'in.
    See, I be ball'in, like Jordan myself, not Michael, but I never fell.
    See, This Is How We Do It, you can call me Montell.
    I ask are you a chicken, or do you not want beef?
    I don't blame ya cause, I shuts 'em down, like it's Do or Die.
    Mang, fuck you Chief!
    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

  2. #2
    MAD! A Disciple's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2015
    Location
    CT (wtby)
    Posts
    3,547
    Battle Record
    0-2

    Re: The Brunt of Front

    I always crack up over that lease cliché... like umm yeah it's cheaper and if you like it you can buy it with all the money you paid to lease applied too it. I haven't ever been able to sell a car for value I always give them away or trade them in. Anyways in regards to the rap - I liked it - it was powerful, wish it directed more to the subject in it - like it was personal to someone so I would've liked to hear more why you didn't like them. You finished strong in the end. I give it a 4.
    +~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~¥~+
    CLA919

  3. #3

    Re: The Brunt of Front

    Quote Originally Posted by A Disciple View Post
    I always crack up over that lease cliché... like umm yeah it's cheaper and if you like it you can buy it with all the money you paid to lease applied too it. I haven't ever been able to sell a car for value I always give them away or trade them in. Anyways in regards to the rap - I liked it - it was powerful, wish it directed more to the subject in it - like it was personal to someone so I would've liked to hear more why you didn't like them. You finished strong in the end. I give it a 4.
    At the end of the day, I just appreciate the feedback, good or bad. Thank you.

    Yeah, I thought about writing it about someone I do know, but kept it generalized this time.

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •