10-12 lines
24 hrs from check
blind spit - no feed
no hate votes
checkin...
10-12 lines
24 hrs from check
blind spit - no feed
no hate votes
checkin...
checkin.... good luck, hope you got a ghost writer.
hahah. k. good luck to you too...im not lookin for a win, jus ta be impressive.
... Aight, well maybe you need 24 hrs to key in a battle, but I can't hold this back any longer ...
Check it pass the mic, so I can show howta hack it right,
Ima pull out all the stops, as if installin traffic lights;
Im like a huge damn, the way Im haltin his flow,
I realize he's "$pit", but here he's gunna learn ta swallow;
His pride and my rhymes, his rep is strong and mine's weaker,
But his verse's full of "miss" punches, as if from a wife beater;
My verse is a religious outline, a sin to defy it,
No way in Hell he could see me, cuz this is a "blind $pit";
He must be losin teeth, ... the way he is "bitin posts",
You may be spectacular, ... but so is my "writin ghost"...
check it,
Let me start off & state the obvious... I'll put it Simple and Plain
the Thread Title... is the only time you'll ever put a K.O. by my name
how can you Blindspit a verse... when you got Twenty-Four Hours?
Guess It's Similar to how ya Strong Area... is in bein a Coward
said you Not Lookin for a Win... you won't get one so don't Stress Kid
not sure I get your approach... How is losin to me bein Impressive?
You'll be another Irate Flyweight... that my punches make Smile Hate
Leave you're Eyes like a Broken Phone... that can only Dial 8
Yeah, you spit Slick... that's why your Punches never Stuck to Me
how could you beat me Down... when I got you lookin Up to me?
you wanna dance with the Devil... but you only Steppin on Toes
you think you could beat Known Talent... when you lose to John Doe's?
Merked. Take your time, you will still lose...
^^Ha ha he already spit... didn't see that, we must a been typin at the same time.. lol
good luck.
Good spit $pit...now les see some votes, uppin ( 1 ).
Not enough posts to poll, but here's what I thought.........
Spit' took this easily.....came with better personals and punches that hit alot harder...also showed some nice creativity...KayOhh...you just didn't come hard enough....punches and personals were so/so...but didn't really match Spits...you should also try being more creative...as some of yer ideas felt played.... My vote > $pitacular ( better punches,personals,creativity, and a nice opener)
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$pit took this...Closer than it should have been...KO came too basic...rhymed simplistic words and came with too much filler and played lines....whyd you admit you have a Ghost Writer KO? Anyway....Vote goes to $pit for a verse with harder punches and personals
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i think KayOhh took this just cause i like his flow i felt it more then spit alight
^^^Mods please get rid of this bullshit vote. Fuckin retard....lol
Yeah, that is pretty brutal...
You mind explainin a bit?
up up up................................................ .......
Lmao ah man i see him spittin better than youOriginally Posted by lyric
Check it pass the mic, so I can show howta hack it right,
Ima pull out all the stops, as if installin traffic lights;
eh, concept was alright here, althoughyou needed more of a connection up through your setup yea mean? the set wasjust kinda fillish
Im like a huge damn, the way Im haltin his flow,
I realize he's "$pit", but here he's gunna learn ta swallow;
ok bar, a little played. you lacked real punchs that that were directed at your opponent it came off generic
His pride and my rhymes, his rep is strong and mine's weaker,
But his verse's full of "miss" punches, as if from a wife beater;
alright wordplay with the second bar, not the best though. slightly played but not really on this board the set.
My verse is a religious outline, a sin to defy it,
No way in Hell he could see me, cuz this is a "blind $pit";
eh alright. no much of a personal liek your tryign to use it as. could have been better. set was alright had an ok connection for that line
He must be losin teeth, ... the way he is "bitin posts",
You may be spectacular, ... but so is my "writin ghost"...
ending could have been better. andi resent that last bar, you have no one in ghost writers writting for you!!! because im a dumb as and would belive such a moronic thing stated......
Over all you could have worked on direction of your bars instead of it coming off sounding generic. you had alright metaphors could have used more wordplay though.Your punchs didnt need more strength to, rhyme scheme was alright
Let me start off & state the obvious... I'll put it Simple and Plain
the Thread Title... is the only time you'll ever put a K.O. by my name
good opening, nice play off his name. connection flowed withthe follow through
how can you Blindspit a verse... when you got Twenty-Four Hours?
Guess It's Similar to how ya Strong Area... is in bein a Coward
heh heh.. nice... could have worked the flow a little betteron your verse over all but good hit
said you Not Lookin for a Win... you won't get one so don't Stress Kid
not sure I get your approach... How is losin to me bein Impressive?
eh, this bar could have been better. made it more personal, not the most origanl concept but alright and had good direction
You'll be another Irate Flyweight... that my punches make Smile Hate
Leave you're Eyes like a Broken Phone... that can only Dial 8
good similie wordplay, although i have heard it before.. could have worked a better punch in it over all
Yeah, you spit Slick... that's why your Punches never Stuck to Me
how could you beat me Down... when I got you lookin Up to me?
follow through is played. set was alright
you wanna dance with the Devil... but you only Steppin on Toes
you think you could beat Known Talent... when you lose to John Doe's?
[/b]again played with the end, heard similar lines[/b]
good vese over all, conceptsa were ok, alot better than most on the board. rhyme scheme coul dhave been used better, could have had more multis in it with more inners and outters. wordplay could have been toned up some here in this verse as well as personal shots.
Good verse though
The best battle ive seen today
Vote- $pitacular
Came through with a more direction, ultimatly that won it for him. had nice punchs and edged it a little with the metaphors over.
Peep this and drop an honest vote then ill come back an Poll vote
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115298
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114834
Uppin...
Comon peepz, this is a tight battle, les see some opinions.
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