kracka t--life is crazy

[kaotic~theory]

yo life is crazy,people goin mad.....
nobody gives a damn about life and its sad.....
every day cats comitting crimes,and try to clear their minds by spittin rymes..
people killin each other for something stupid,and somethin simple.....
gonna take a glok 9 to someone for a color,they gonna pop em like a pimple...
but never look forward to the consequenses,or punishment......
sittin on death row noing that not once in their life anything they did was an acomplishment........
6 months until they will be sentenced to death.....
aint no life,kids,family,aint nothin in that subject left....
but your soul and the 6 months in front of you,and your last breath.....
this life is crazy.....yea this life is crazy


yo hope yall liked it
i dont do alot of open mics so hopefully yall will go easy on me thanx.
ALSO THIS IS MY FIRST RAPBATTLES OPEN MIC,AND I CANT IMPROVE UNLESS YALL LET ME KNOW WASUP.


http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...885post1276885
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...915post1276915

[kaotic~theory]

uppin

[Maven.]

reply to two other open mics and post links to your replies in this thread or it gets closed.
thank you.

[BPINCfreelance]

i get that you didnt reply to two other threads but ill post anyways cuz im so nice, hehe
this was rather simplistic good topic if you could write longer about it and get more complex, the rhymes seem not to thought out, like the first thing that came to mind was used
mad, sad
crimes, rhymes
simple, pimple
jus try and spend more time getting more compex
structure could use a little work but you do got a flow goin, so sall good
keep doin you and keep stickin round here, gettin feed, and improving
aite man
reply to 2 or more threads next time you gone post
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[kaotic~theory]

Im Workin On It I Got 1 Write Now But Please Keep It Open
Links Will Be Provided In A Second

[PerpetuILL]

good job man...well sorta
topic is kinda played and all
but for such a short OM it
had somewhat imagery and vocab
so I'll give you a hand on that...
good work try elevating think original
just whatever comes to mind

[kaotic~theory]

Ok Thanx Yo
Keep In Mind Thats My First Open Mic
Im Sure Ill Elevate,by Keeping At It