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    Pain..

    Im abstract..a Human knitted in Pain You can't perceieve
    Im a Building block of Feeling..so when You Kill you feel me
    Im not an average Joe, But Im your average everyday rapper
    As I try to endlessly think of Punchlines to expose to Laughter
    And the whole time my story is seen as Pity by the outside
    Its like Grades,They can be more than decent..if half of us tried
    While the other half makes it, And you know they try hardest
    while we look in envy..and wonder where our sloth done started
    So we become artists, I chose to Paint my Pictures With Words
    Im running out of canvas as our leaders are running out of Earth
    They endlessly babble on, Drama is apparent like its a school Locker
    And we are caught in the middle of it, The innocent, we're locked up
    So fuck politics, and all the bullshit it seems to always bring
    Even if something's built, another idiot seems to destroy it
    Its just an endless cycle, until the cycle ends itself tonight
    And the pain we all feel is me there, but I see it different....
    Does it feel right?
    You came for a pity story, and Im only here to deliver
    Im the ghetto proof, so Then absorb me like Liquor
    Drugs create a fantasy world, Which most think they ownin
    and Im there, Pain, what my feelings are sewn in....
    I am the object of clothes, of the Grim Reaper's tunic
    I am the lead contained in ur heart after the Shootin
    I am innovation, I claim to be a gothic's best friend
    they claim me as god, as I am what you feel at ur end
    But I am cursed to be so lonely, I am my own cursed night
    As I drag another soul away...yet it still doesn't feel Right..
    -The Faculty-
    Learn from the Best, Bitches..

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    You need to leave a link to a open mic that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    that was decent....above average...much room for improvement, but I was delightfully impressed.....enjoyed reading it....it keep s a reader interested simply from the way the flow is structured...you kept a similar tone throughout...a lil boastful....like i said, overall decent
    Bittersweet

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    nice
    i didnt like the structure kinda hard 2 put 2gether at first
    nice meti & multis
    i like how u kinda sound helpless, it gives it more voice

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    So we become artists, I chose to Paint my Pictures With Words
    Im running out of canvas as our leaders are running out of Earth

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