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Thread: It Was Written (Slam)

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    It Was Written (Slam)

    before you read it...take into consideration that this is ment as a Slam piece...so it might sound akward at times...

    I offer an alternate view
    One of which what the world feeds us
    Is only spit back in it's face
    I offer this view with no documentation
    No physical or written proof
    And I use that
    As my reasoning for why my view
    Carry's more truth then documented history
    You may counter with
    "But it was written"
    And for those whom wear this argument
    I ask you consider...

    ...It was written
    John F. Kennedy was shot from the front
    By an assasin whom was at his back...
    ...It was written
    That a certain terrorist attack
    Was unexpected, and unpreventable...
    ...It was written
    And so you believe
    But your beliefs are flawed
    Because it was also written
    That the son of god
    Had hair of wool
    And skin of bronze
    Yet every stained glass window
    And on every cross
    Hangs a blonde haired, blue-eyed
    Good ol' American boy
    But you ignore this
    Since these two pages are stuck together
    ...However...
    I won't let these givens be uncontested
    Thus I offer an alternate view
    One that recognizes...
    We've never had magic bullets
    And it takes two people
    To shoot from two directions...
    One that recognizes...
    They knew and did nothing
    That they sacrificed 5,000 lives
    For an attempt at controlling the middle east
    One that recognizes...
    Jesus was a black jew
    And the world shows its faith
    By screaming nigger and kyke
    One that recognizes...
    Brutus was not an honorable man
    One that recognizes...
    White-out can't fix this one
    That our knowledge has been corrupted
    To the point where the truth said "fuck it"
    Because our ignorance was too great

    ...You can choose to shrug off my view
    My alternate view
    I will not argue it
    I only offer it to those who listen
    And to those who counter
    That it was written
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    ..... Wow, liked it a lot.

    Seems more to be put in Open Mic, I see some-what poetic things in here. Like the story line but other than that the whole topic seems more or less for the open mic.

    Anyway, I enjoyed this more than any other open mic I've ever read, I woulda gave you more credit if it was. -.-

    Other than that, a very good read. And the flow was flawless. Yet the rhyming was not needed but wanted more from the reader. I like.

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=180212

    ^ getatit.

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    thanks for the feed back...i'll get at your piece
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    lol...damn, i dont remember sleeping ever being this bad
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    that was da shit (unless that offends u,if so that was a great piece) I felt like I was a the openmicthat I usually go to,it had so much energy that I felt lie the ords were projecting of the page!!! Real hype! And the content was beautiful and its not something I've ever heard done before I'm fired up to write right now!!Keep em comin...til then check m piece "My Body Hurts" and "Climax"

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    thanks for the feedback...
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    real good made me wonda and shit i liked the JFK like that shit hit me keep writtin and ill keep replyin cuz u got talent
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    lol...thanks for the feed....much appreciated...
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    yo, tell me wuts a Slam and I'ma reply to this too

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    Slam is poetry that is performed...spoken word...
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    ooooooooh... sort of an audio, right ?
    a'aight than it should make no dif., I'm on it
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    yo that was fucking dope

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    this was pretty nice

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    This was nice and its good to read different style and such... I thought that you did a real good job with this...

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    thanks for all the feedback...yall are making me eat that comment about sleeping huh? lol...anyways my other piece only got one reply, so blah.... and alexe, its a lil different than an audio but you got the right idea...
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