..::Heaven's Dreamcatcher::..

[lyrically_insane]

The Seasons call the treasons at the light of the flaming match
Now Indian feathers weather which of Satans dreams to catch
…My spirit glows as my trust grows but I can’t wish to oppose
…The river sends shivers returned from out the tip of its flow
I’m asking how is the devotion of emotions completely devoid
While heartstrings that are things closer to more power avoid
Explosions and erosions of potions vessel blood powers within
Feel like melted ice cream I scream as I’m devoured by evil sin
Asked God to reserve twelve curved parking lot spots in heaven
But Minus 1 spot for my heart apart from the rest leaves eleven
The ten angels born again make up trends for all the lost ones
Suicides bloody wrists twists and fists that reveal missed sons
My spot is saved depraved of love above all things and fiends
While the blood gleams in the dreams of the holy angels wings
Veins of pain filled with shame drain me and leave heartache
Horror scenes replay in a dream, sixteen gleams and I awake



..it was all a dream that had been caught by my dream catcher..


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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=182821

[iNFiNiTE A]

"Feel like melted ice cream I scream as I’m devoured by evil sin"

yo that was dope... vocab was used at the right time.. flowed great too... this was a great drop

[NathanielJenkins]

Wow, that is deep. It flows like a river without any rocks.

[lyrically_insane]

..thanx fo tha feed homies!..

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[..IllThoughtZ..]

i was feelin dis piece..you had flawless structure and yo vocab was on point....multies helped da flow a lot....
i like how at da end you were caught in a dream but woke up...dat added depth to da piece and made me read it ova...overall dis was a good read and i look forward to more drops from you...

[StuartStrange]

Really Good. Like Ill mentioned it was flawless structure wise, vocab was hot, yes and multies abound. i enjoyed reading this piece. Propz

[DeafBlind&Mute]

Much props on the flow. Easy to read and see were the stops were. Good verbage and rhyms. I really really liked the flow and rythm of this piece the most though man. It was just a well put together piece on that end.

[lyrically_insane]

..thanx homies..
..i appreciate tha love!..
..BUMP!..

[lyrically_insane]

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[¤|-.Alpha.-|¤]

Yo you needa change ya scheme, That 2 multi at the begging of each line is lame and get annoying. Stil overall decent verse not bad. Still some stuff you need to work on. Keep elevating.

[lyrically_insane]

..yeh wateva..

..EVERYBODY dont gotta have tha same style you got bro^^..

..well anywayz thanx for all tha feed..

..BUMP!..

[Stat.]

Truely dope man....You have elevated so fast...i loved it..perfect structure great way to use multies...deeply emotional.....its worth a nomination...so i will nominate it.

i urge whoever else who reads this to do the same..

[lyrically_insane]

..yo Crucial..

..thanx again bro!..seriously thanx!..
..thanx for teaching me basically all i know right now!..if it werent for you i wouldnt have even been able to type shit like this...I owe you a BIG one!..and thanx for nominating this!..

..bump!..

[AbusivE]

wooord... this was good, emotion was strong... the big text pissed me off lol, but your structure was pretty much perfect.. multis were all there, helped your flow alot.. every line was very describin wich kept me interested.. but i just feel that you stayed in one spot throughout the whole verse, like you were describing one thing in the whole thing, maybe try creating a story to it or something.. but yeah, other then that everything was on point.. hope to see more from you!

[..Xplosive..]

It Was A Dope Drop...